Teen Poetry #4 |
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silvrduck Member
since 2000-11-05
Posts 146 |
at one brush of a hand, i’ve felt the shivers up my spine.. something i’ve never felt, all the time that you’ve been mine. I know it seems harsh, and i’m the one which deserves to cry.. but I can’t help this, if I don’t want a you and I. yet then there are the times whenever we’re alone.. and I can’t help but quiver at the sound of your soft tone. please know I hate to do this, so soon in advance.. but how could you not notice? there is no us in this romance! judging solely, by the things i’ve known before.. things taught by a love, yet a friend and nothing more. there will be envy, I can see it there right now.. about things you are sensing, I know you’re wondering how? well your assumptions are wrong, I regret to say... whatever you’re thinking, trust me.. it isn’t that way. *The hardest thing to do is watch the one you love, love somebody else.* |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
I know how it feels to be in this situation and it is always so hard to have to do something that will hurt someone else. i really liked this one, keep posting. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
There was a lot a pain in this poem. It really sucks to be in this sort of situation. Your poem had a great deal of power behind it. congrats! Regina a small cut is only the beggining of a life in pain |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
A lot of emotion was put in this. I know about the situation, and I'm sorry you have to go through it. Great poem. Nicely written... keep posting. --Marie It's true that we don't know what we've got until we lose it, but it's also true that we don't know what we've been missing until it arrives. |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This is such a sad piece. Situations like these are never easy, and I hope sharing this with us helped you out. Thanks for sharing. "Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Oh that's so sad!! Poor poor person! But it sounds like it's for the better, but I don't know it all! Good peom though! Very good "Some men see things as they are and say why. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Very sad piece.......I hope all gets better. Anyhow I liked it very much! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This is sorta-kinda-just a tad bit of the way im feeling lately lol...I cant really explain how i feel but this is part of it. Great poem tho and i hope everything works out for you. [This message has been edited by xShUgArHiGhx (edited 04-04-2001).] |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, The poem was good but I didn't care for the topic I am in a happy mood but my one releif of pain (no matter how breif) is ICE CREAM mmmm anyway great poem -- Linc "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Good job! This doesn't sound like a great thing to be going through. I hope things end fine. "Be kind, for everyone you meet is fighting a hard battle" |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Things like this is not easy to express. But you did really well. How are things now? "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Angel Bee Member
since 2001-01-30
Posts 176Virginia |
this was good, i enjoyed it. keep writing. :o) ~ab~ *~Sometimes just holding hands is holding on to everything.~* |
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