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QTpieOmy Junior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 11Illinois |
Hey guys! Please respond! Love Always, Tara Tears Somehow I can Smile through these tears And somehow I manage To face all my fears These tears, That I never let fall, Ive held them back, Through it all. Ive put on a smile, That never seems to fade, From holding my tears back, The price that I have paid... It tore me up, It really did, To keep these feelings, So well hid. I finally found the courage, To tell you how I feel, Cuz I'll never find a love, That is truly this real. You promised me, Youd always be there, But now it seems, That you just dont care. I want these tears to fall, But that would mean Ive given in, And to do that Would be a mortal sin Im clinging to a past, That doesnt let me choose, It doesnt let me win, It only lets me lose. Makes me lose a love, That I once had, Leaves me wondering why, And always makes me sad. I still wont let these tears fall, Even from this pain, Cuz its really not your fault, I'm the one to blame. But for some reason, I refuse to cry. I've cried before, But just cant now Id let it all out, But I really dont know how. The fear of losing you, Leaves me down, And feeling blue. But you see Ive already lost you, Cuz I didnt know what to do I didnt realize then, That youre my only one. So now im left, To feel down, Cuz your love, Is not around. Even through this pain, I manage to smile through my tears, And if one day they fall, I might forget my fears. [This message has been edited by QTpieOmy (edited 01-17-2001).] |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey Tara, I really liked this. I know how ya feel, too, hiding it all in. Great job in expressing yourself, and keep writing. ~Carly inspiration of my art search for light out of the dark all the pictures in my heart lie awake there in my fog... |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Hey, nicely done! I liked it a lot! |
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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
thats Sad... great poem but really sad. Keep up the good work. >¶Øʆ< |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
Tara, All I have to say is there is a three letter word that everyone hates to hear, but alway seem to help them. And it helps everyone. You know sometimes... people think that to not cry makes a person strong, but in all reality it only makes them weak. Think about that please, and don't take what i said wrong please. ~Amanda~ To do anyting LESS then your BEST is to SACRIFICE the GIFT!!! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nice one here. I like this a lot. Keep posting and I havent seen you in a while. So do post more!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
Hey man this poem was da bomb!!! if you are writing this from a personal experience then i'd say that you and me are exactly alike. LOL if not then forget what i just said. LOL j/k  ~*Valerie*~ *...Remember your roots, my friend they're right down below, because heroes come and heroes go...* - Creed |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
Wow~ i really liked this..alot...page right out of my life Keep up the great work, i hope to read more soon*dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I love the way you started and ended this, and the middle is good too Good job on the poem!"But you see Ive already lost you, Cuz I didnt know what to do" "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
that is a good one you described each feeling so well and in detail i do agree with Angel though, crying could do you good there's nothing wrong with it as you said, it'll torn you apart already Thanks for the read I really would love to see you post more I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
Hey....well this was a very touching and emotional post. I like the form, you don't really change structure from line to line. Personally though, I find that tears get some emotion out as does poetry. They can't solve anything, but they might help you heal. I would stick with the poetry. Wonderful job Salma |
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QTpieOmy Junior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 11Illinois |
Hey everyone! Thanks for responding. It really means a lot to me when people say what they feel about what I write. And yes, I am writing this from life experiance but it was awhile ago. Ive cried many times since I wrote that and I feel a lot better with the help of all my friends. Thanks again for reading! |
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