Teen Poetry #4 |
Goodbye |
Tamma
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV |
I was amazed to hear your voice Although it made me want to cry I even had a smile on my face When I got to say my goodbye. I didn’t think I would ever Be able to say goodbye to you This is my final goodbye So I must bid you adieu. I loved you so much With my entire heart Once we were so close But looks like we grew apart. I thought our hearts were one I thought we were in love I wrote to you a letter And attached it to a dove. She flew up into the wind And disappeared in the night sky Did you get my letter That tells you goodbye? It took me a month, but I FINALLY got to tell Justin goodbye i dont know if i should cry because its over, or smile because it happened |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
I really liked the image of the dove in the poem. very nicely done Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Jesse Jaymz Senior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 708Youngstown, ohio |
awwwwww i know how hard goodbyes can be *hugs* and you wrote this one beautifuly. great job. *hugS* Follow me everything is alright |
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Ses Junior Member
since 2001-03-16
Posts 14The Mountain State |
Tam- It sounds like you're finally over Justin. Thats good to hear. Altho after his call, and what you told me happened last Monday, I thought you were gonna have a nervous breakdown. But, you're obviously doing better |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Great post, Tamma. Nicely done. Keep posting... --Marie It's true that we don't know what we've got until we lose it, but it's also true that we don't know what we've been missing until it arrives. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
It's good to see you moving on. Hope to see you progress more. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
there's only one person I never got to say goodbye to. THey've been dead for a little over six months now. I can't say goodbye because I need to say I'm sorry. Anyway, nice poem Tamma. I wish people would stop telling me that I can do anything I want to. I never thought that I couldn't. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Tamma~ Letting go of someone is hard, especially when you grow close to them. I dont know how I would react if I was in your position. At least not as easy as you are. Its hard for me to say goodbye to anyone. But your doing what you have to. Great job on the poem! |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, Good poem enough said. Until your next -- Linc "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." [This message has been edited by Linc (edited 04-06-2001).] |
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branden726
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
Hi LINC its really none of your buisness how many bf's shes had i bet its all about one guy and well as a matter of fact ive only heard of two and well shes my friend and i gots love for her and i love your poem babes "i just love when you bring your whole crew because its just a bigger piece of cake for me to chew threw" |
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Empty tears Member
since 2001-03-12
Posts 64 |
Great poem,it gave me hope that ill be able to move on w/my life after a really painful breakup. thanx for giving a shred of hope in this dark,hopeless world. ~Brittany~ |
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AngelShell Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446not heaven nor hell so... |
Wow, I loved this. It was so real. And so appropriate at this stage in my life. I don't know if anyone else understands this but you know how a poem can often be a lot more powerful if you're going through something like that at the point when you read the poem (that most likely made no sense). Yeah well, I'm trying to say goodbye to this friend but I can't. I loved him so much and he hurt me a lot. Wonderful poem. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Tamma... lately you've been using a rhyme scheme. Very cool! You're trying different aspects of poetry, that is very admirable. I personally prefer the works I have seen of yours that have a rhyme to them, in most cases. Hope you keep this trend up. ~Allan The sun was born, so it shall die. ~VNV Nation, "Further" |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Good for you Tamma. I'm glad you've made a decision and stuck with it. Happy for ya "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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katherine Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Canberra Australia |
yay for you beeing able to say goodbye thats great! i loved the part about the dove it's georgous. keep it up katie if you don't let them in they can't see the real you |
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