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Fragile
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Zombie Man Member
since 1999-06-22
Posts 52Va |
The sun was gone this morning. Not a stray of light in the sky. And I was suspicious. And wondering was it me. God knows my life isn't right. Can I change this problem that holds me down? Will someone help me? But right now I just need to feel some love form you. Why must I be this way? It isn't my fault the sky turned gray. Yes, I was betrayed by my own love. My heart is weak. Oh well, I'm just one of the fragile. The sins of my life haunt me. Your love was my shield. And you...you were my savior. Why did you walk away form me that day?!? What did I do? I swear that I'll win your heart back once again. For always and ever... Poetry is not just words on paper that may rhyme, but words that are from your heart expressing yourself for others to see from your eyes. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
A lot of true passion and ambition in this poem. I think you did a pretty good job on it altogether.  ~Allan Its rather handy being at the top of the food chain...you can sort things out and not get the blame for it. ~~Elizabeth Johnson (anonymousfemale) |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
I really liked it. good work. lots of power behind those words. regina a small cut is only the beggining of a life in pain |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is a really good poem. I think everyone asks themselves those questions from time to time. I really likes the opening on this poem. It was interesting. Very nice job. --Marie It's true that we don't know what we've got until we lose it, but it's also true that we don't know what we've been missing until it arrives. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I thought you did rather well on this poem. One of my favs by you!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
I'll ditto their comments. Nice job.~Carly Many miles behind my eyelashes, there always seems to be |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
a lot of people have so much longing lately your did well on this piece hoep you do share more thanks for the read "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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