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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada 
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im on a roll.. Deep dreams filled with endless pleasure warm arms trap me against a hard chest holding me close, squeezing away all my pain there is no more pain & sadness in this dream world only bright skys, hot sun and pure love unrealistic views blur my eyes a life filled with innocence swallows me whole a joyful mind wanders to a subject it adores hazel eyes,tanned skin, and a deep rumbling laugh, shapes a boy with a golden heart as my dream fades I wake up realizing that life is never that simple never fair or happy but until then I'll continue to dream. Regina a small cut is only the beggining of a life in pain |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
I really loved the ending to this poem. very nice work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I'll agree, the ending was genius!  Great job on it Regina, this was one of your best I've seen so far. Keep up the good work! Don't stop dreaming. ~Allan Its rather handy being at the top of the food chain...you can sort things out and not get the blame for it. ~~Elizabeth Johnson (anonymousfemale) |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I haven't read that much from you thus far, Regina, but this poem is amazing and the ending really caught me. Great job, and I hope to read more from you soon. --Marie It's true that we don't know what we've got until we lose it, but it's also true that we don't know what we've been missing until it arrives. [This message has been edited by Fading Away (edited 03-31-2001).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked it. Thought you did very well Ina. Sometimes life is great though.....sometimes it IS fairytale......  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Wow, Regina.........library. ~Carly Many miles behind my eyelashes, there always seems to be |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
thank you all for your replies. Javier your right sometimes life is a fairy tale. regina a small cut is only the beggining of a life in pain |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Aww, it can be that simple, just wait for the right guy...There arent many good guys around but the ones who are worth having are the ones usually that are available. "Some men see things as they are and say why. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Amazing you've outdone yourself Ina this was really a good piece thanks for the beautiful read "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Dana Samples Member
since 2001-04-07
Posts 68 |
hey!! great poem i love how you talked about dreams vs. reality. i think it was superb!! lots of love, dana |
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bigfuzzybear Junior Member
since 2001-04-29
Posts 11 |
its a wonderful poem great visualization. I love it, fairy tales do come true and my hazle eyes will always adore you, love you brad |
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