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You captured my heart
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You captured my heart |
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Angel Bee Member
since 2001-01-30
Posts 176Virginia |
You captured my Heart I see you as you smile across the room You seem to take everyone's sadness and gloom Sometimes I think we should be together You're always there in any kind of weather For some reason I know you'll never let me down You put a smile on my face and take away my frown But you see we both are with another So we remain distant from each other But yet you're still there by my side Never a tear for you have I cried I know we could end up together, someday But it isn't soon enough so to say Thats okay, I've known right from the start That you would be the one to capture my heart |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Aww tha'ts sad...but I hope you two get your chance. Good luck, keep posting. No angels in heaven nor demons below the sea, could ever dissever my soul from the soul of the beautiful Annabel Lee |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well I think it's kinda bad to like somebody while yer with somebody else....but then I'd be a hypocrit if I condemned you for doing so. It pains me to be in the same position you're in. It sucks.... I hope all goes well in the future.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
the endin was powerful a really good poem nice job  |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
This was a sad poem with a very sad ending. i hope that everything works of for you. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
"Patience is a virtue" "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. [This message has been edited by acire (edited 05-02-2001).] |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I've had this feeling before and it completely bothered me..cuz in a way i felt kinda unfaithful even thinking such things but im strange in that way Very good poem!! But very sad  |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Nice, powerful ending. This is really good, Angel. The meter is nice, and that really helps the flow. Nice work. --Marie Don't ever be someone's slogan, because you are poetry. |
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