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Reflections on existence |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA 
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January fifteenth. I’m home-sick for Autumn. I sit by the desk and out of boredom, reflect on existence, on being immortal, on God, which I’m lacking, and on God which is present. The latter -- my own creation, the former I have destructed. Imagination has led me to have a long conversation with the conscience that flows in my blood. “Religion is the opium of the people!” If that’s so, then how come the peep hole is not wide enough for the needle,-- and by “needle” I mean a warm ray. Not to say that I have a lot to offer, but I welcomed the Holy Spirit often,-- every day, I left all the windows opened, no one came and now, some say I’m unholy. I’ve read many sermons, many hymns and gospels and now I’m certain that I’m with Nietzsche, that life’s a burden. If I was God, I would also abandon my creation and leave it to spin in orbit. I’d hide my trail and take the forfeit,-- who wants to play king when life is morbid? But I don’t have faith because I stand on my own two feet and that is quenching, I despise afterlife and the idea of aging, and what’s more I just hate changing in order to be labeled by others as “right”. If others jumped off a bridge, I wouldn’t follow I choose not to believe in death,-- it’s hollow and not because “it’s too much to swallow,” but because there’s nothing to bite. I find my release in mere existence,-- the alarm clock resounds to start up my pistons and no matter how short or long a distance, I travel gladly. What can I say? I love living and that’s why the question that bothered Hamlet, does not give me headaches. I happened therefore I am. For breakfast, I love the omelet,-- and the lack of such pleasures leaves me grieving. But overall, I can’t say that life treated me badly,-- I have a great family and I am madly in love with a girl and my neighbors are friendly,-- at least, they act so. Could life be better?! I wasn’t born with a silver spoon in my mouth,-- and I’m thankful for that. I’ve done well without any help from a God and that makes me proud. I firmly believe that tomorrow, no matter what may occur, I’ll wake up, tucked in my bed, on January sixteenth and I will extend my left arm to silence the clock on the stand. I’ll will eat and the day will follow exactly the same old routine as the day before it and the night will reflect the night that bore it,-- there’s a pattern to life and therefore, to me, immortality seems to be likely. So, what’s the purpose, if life’s eternal?— to make all external become internal (and of course vice-versa), to keep a journal, to search for beauty, to search for purpose,-- to be!—it’s all so simple. The rest will fall into place, as it must in nature. Each soul will find its object of worship. And after all, the dust will settle and truth will surface,-- and it’s all so simple... Check out my poetry here: http://www.unknownpoets.com/db/authors/master [This message has been edited by Master (edited 01-17-2001).] |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Master: I haven't seen you for ages! Or maybe I just haven't been visiting as much as I should. Great piece of writing!! It highlights so many aspects of life that everyone sees but no one fully takes in and thinks about. The last part was especially good about everyone finding their purpose in life. I found this particulary interesting. It is so true that the soul will find its own object of worship as it is human nature to do so. Bravo. ~AF~ "Poetry is the language in which man explores his own amazement." Christopher Fry "In three words I can sum up everything I've learned about life: |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
Thanks AF, I'm glad you liked it! I blame this one on insomnia! lol but "...it's all so simple!" |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
any suggestions? |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
This is quite a tale you have here, although it does disterb me so in parts, but then again life is disterbing and not everything we were ment to fully understand. Never the less wonderful poem and what a discriptive poet you are. Keep up the wonderful work. ~Amanda~ |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
To be honest, I was hesitant to read this poem, because of it's massiveness. But I insist to all that see this... EVERYONE, READ THIS POEM!!!!!! Master, my friend, you and I are the same in so many ways, nearly everything that you said I can relate to directly. I have been getting on without any help from a "God" and it is truly great for my self-esteem. I have never felt better about life, than I did when I decided that everything I have was earned, not handed to me by fate. Belief in your own ability over your own luck is great, as far as I am concerned. It's too bad that so many people are corrupt by their fear and lack of belief in the power of humanity. Thanks for reminding me that I'm not alone! I hope to see more of you in here. -Allan |
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peanogrl83 Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 202 |
Master, old friend!!!! Long time no see! Wonderful, as always. You're work has been sorely missed! Ta ta! Vreni |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Beautiful one here. I liked this one tons.....took a while to read but worth it.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
It's great to see you back here posting again. We certainly missed all that talent. What a beautiful post.....keep writing and posting. Salma |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
Thank you all, it's good to be back here! |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Master: Maaaaayyyyyun! Good points here. You ought to post this at the philosophy forum. You'd be well recieved, and would likely start quite a good discussion. This was quite enlightening to me, mostly because of my own struggles with the concepts of existence, as u can see in my recent poem The Church of Lust. I think I can sort of see a bit of myself in you, because not too long ago, I was at the stage you're at in the "battle", lol. I was dealing with atheists and stuff on the net, and losing faith in God. I tried to control the downward spiral at first, but after a while, I gave up and let go. It was rather interesting what has happened. My mind has sort of been generating its own stuff now, and I'm sort of becoming a more holistic and less fundamental person, adopting both reductionism and holism - whichever suits me best at any particular moment. It seems we've both come to similar conclusions. I am adopting the faith you have - that everything in both mine and everyone else's life will unfold as it should. So, now that my jibber jabber is complete.. Good poem. Your rhyming style and point of volta[I think that's the right word for the turning point here] were quite well done. |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
Thank you for your reply! In some sense I guess that we are a bit alike in our thoughts on religion. By the way, I liked your poem! Keep writing, and thanks for your comments! |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
The way this is written made it a great read, very well done Master! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
Thanks Lakewalker, this is the first time that I tried to write in this style. Glad you liked it! |
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