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Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

0 posted 2001-03-27 04:02 PM

Manifestation.

The manifestation of my dreams,
The light shines all round you,
You express beyond all means,
What words just cannot do,
Your the accumulation,
Of my every fantasy,
A figment of my imagination,
Your everything I want you to be,
Your the stars that shine down at night,
That twinkle in my eyes,
Your the one that makes things right,
Your the sunshine in my skies,
The manifestation of my dreams,
And your too tempting to resist,
But you tear me apart at the seams,
Because you just don’t exist.

" War is peace,
Freedom is Slavery,
Ignorance is strength" - George Orwell "1984"

LoveBug

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since 2000-01-08

Posts 4697

1 posted 2001-03-27 04:12 PM

I really love this piece! I thought that you were talking about someone in your life until the last line. Those dreams can seem so real, can't they? I hope they come true for you!

"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2001-03-27 04:29 PM

This was great. I really liked how it ended. You did VERY VERY well on this one. The desire of this love hurts just as much as not getting it.
I liked this.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

3 posted 2001-03-28 03:42 PM

Yeah, I thought this was wonderful as well. Great twist on the ending, Marshal. You really outdid yourself, which isn't easy to do.

~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

4 posted 2001-03-28 04:38 PM

*Applauds* VERY nice job here! I think this is one of the best one I've read from you yet! Great work

--Marie

I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am.

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

5 posted 2001-04-06 03:40 PM

Hey, look at it this way
Dreams do come true you know

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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