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Bright_Eyes Junior Member
since 2000-12-22
Posts 29Plymouth, MN |
Even the sunshine dares to smile, at this confused teenager, amidst her minor despairs and stresses. Even flowers dare to bloom, and grace her with their presence, in her times of self-hate. And in the times when she feels, there's no one left that cares, even the wind dares to caress her cheek. Why, oh why, can't you? ~Becky |
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Baby Gansta Junior Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 24 |
Wow! A sad put a very beautiful poem with a powerful ending. Sometimes people will look at you but not see you, and that's just blindness, stupidity and their loss! keep smiling Becky  |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Wow I really liked this poem. So touching....wow......very impressive here. The ending left me with a sigh and kind of a hallow feeling on the inside. Like.....since you're not getting this person to carress your cheek, to love you......neither was I. Very touching poem.....  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Humanity cowers in the face of nature... comparing a person to what your environment does. I'm curious if the forces of nature are metaphors for other people... this thought lingers in my head. Great poem, either way. ^_^ -Allan |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
We all need people there for us during this harsh time of our lives. I hope you know that your Passions family will always be there!! Thanks for sharing."Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
wow the poem really climaxed at the end.. a truely perfect ending for a great poem nice job ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I really like the way this is written too, the ending has such power written into it. Great job of making the reader really feel this one! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
This was such a sad poem... soo much is being kept inside... I hope that you can come out and talk to someone soon! Good work... Melz!! You can't hurt me anymore than I have hurt myself already... |
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LoVe2PaRtY469 New Member
since 2001-01-10
Posts 5 |
I really like this poem a lot.. sometimes I just really want someone to reach out and help me, I totally relate. Very well written and as everyone else said the end is very powerful!! Ashlie |
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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
wow. great poem. great imagery as well. Keep writing. >¶Øʆ< |
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Bright_Eyes Junior Member
since 2000-12-22
Posts 29Plymouth, MN |
Allan~ I wasn't thinking of them as metaphors for other people, but I love to hear other interpretations. Thank you! Thanks babygangsta, dopey dope and lovebug and melster for your kind words... they mean a lot. Thanks to everyone else as well! |
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Bright_Eyes Junior Member
since 2000-12-22
Posts 29Plymouth, MN |
Allan~ I wasn't thinking of them as metaphors for other people, but I love to hear other interpretations. Thank you! Thanks babygangsta, dopey dope and lovebug and melster for your kind words... they mean a lot. Thanks to everyone else as well! |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
It really makes me feel bad to see how other hurt Your poem just shows this and more Beautiful poem, though a little sad thanks for the beautiful read keep sharing I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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