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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i'll jus post a new topic k? really end of dialogue  |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Hmm... you have a few grammatical errors in this poem that you should take a look at. Just little things here or there that kind of disguise the true beauty of what you were saying. The poem itself was lovely, it had good meaning to it. If I were you, I'd have titled it "The River," or "Unknown as it Flows." But call it whatever you like, this was just my suggestion.  ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
thanks 4 the reply..... [This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 03-25-2001).] |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Give them time, man. Teen Explorer is empty. Nobody goes there. And it takes a while before people look at things sometimes... it's a slow day today. just, like I said, give it time. have patience. If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort [This message has been edited by Allan Riverwood (edited 03-25-2001).] |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
sorry ya'll guess i'm jus really stressed bout ma life these days and i've come 2 be sensitive bout little things hope ya'll understand i'm jus goin through a lot these times of ma life |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
No worries, bro. End of dialogue. maybe throw your poem back in somewhere so that we all know what to reply to?  If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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