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Another Face in the Crowd |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia 
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She hides it with her smile, With her athleticism, And with her good grades. The world would not believe it, Even if she confessed. "Not you," They would say, "You're too smart, And too strong to do that." But she does do it, And its grip on her is tightening. It's taken control of her, And made her its puppet, Powerless in defense, And unable to resist. She appears healthy, Yet her insides are slowly rotting away. The foul smell lingers on her hand While the splash marks on her pants Threatens the survival of the secret. And she is not alone, There are many others. They unknowingly share In a secret club Where they seem to be the only members. She surveys the crowd, Wondering who else shares her secret, But they don't stand out. She, along with them, Is just another face in the crowd. --Marie I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am. |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Wow....this one, jsut like the other, very dramatic, and def going into my library. If these are you, I have to say, talk to someone, don't do anything selfdestructive, people will listen. "Some men see things as they are and say why. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Once again... an outstanding job. Free verse this good makes me jealous.  ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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AngelShell Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446not heaven nor hell so... |
I really liked this, don't know if I quite understand it but it was good none the less. Keep it up. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Great job on this one Marie. YOU have such a great talent for writing. I hope all is well.......seriously, if you need to talk, e-amil me  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
You're a good narrator with your poems. Have you tried writing prose. I think you should go check out the forum "Passions in Prose" Thanks for the read "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, I agree with Aicre this is a great poem loved it and your poetry is superb -- Linc "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
I agree with allan, free verse this good makes me jealous. *sigh* at least it gives me something to aspire to. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
I really want to thanks you for writing this poem. I can honestly say I know what you are going thorough. Email me please! *If the only place I can live my dreams is in my sleep, then I'll sleep forever!* |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
This was excellent it flowed very well and I must admit being a little more than jealous. Good work. Andrew. " No Army can conquer a galaxy, yet faith alone can overturn the universe." |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Wow, Marie. The images I was getting just then were mind blowing. I'm sorry you had to go through all of this. It's tough. *hugs* Keep writing your heart stopping pieces. ~AF~ "Always keep focus on your dreams because most often than not that's all you'll have." - Javier |
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