Teen Poetry #4 |
An Axe to mine Father |
Deranger Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498Somewhere, between here and there |
Chained and forever bonded to pain, Amidst all my misery – Amidst all my shame, Come down and do something with me – anything for a minute of your company But no, you don’t see me; remember the nickel arcade? A shame you’re not here, to see what I’ve become, Some are terrified: those who know me best; others just wonder what’s with the unrest That churns deep inside my soul; what passions burn buried inside my heart, And for what things do I yearn; wanna learn enough to never be like you, Do you remember? Don’t you remember? Do you even remember my name? Off with his head! Off with his head! You don’t even remember my name! Normalcy denied, by the sins of my father exercise, A hold on my life until I die, and until- I die. I knew you never told a single lie! Because- Everything was a lie. And where is this, forgiveness? Maybe, I suppose, we could dispose of this foolishness After all, we are all adults, adult choices so clear to me, Apart from paternal responsibility… And what is this, forgiveness? Off with his head! Off with his head! You don’t even remember my name! Off with his head! Off with his head! You don’t even remember my name! [This message has been edited by Deranger (edited 03-24-2001).] |
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AngelShell Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446not heaven nor hell so... |
*clap clap clap* Always one for a powerfull return aren't we... If only your life could mirror the insanity of your poetry's sacrificial intention... |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
YOU!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!YOU!!!!!!!!!!!WHERE'D YOU GO???????!!!!!!!!!!?????????!!!!!!!!!!! nice poem. ~Carly "The eye sees a thing more clearly in dreams than the imagination awake." |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I like this poem... It's an interesting style. I liked that. I liked the way you used the bold text... it really adds to the poem. Nice job. --Marie I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Yeah, good use of HTML. I liked the repititions in the last line... you made an interesting and unique format here. I think this is wonderfully creative. Great job. Hope to see you around more. ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I liked the creativeness of the style too, and the poem is good as well "Be kind, for everyone you meet is fighting a hard battle" |
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Deranger Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498Somewhere, between here and there |
I thank you guys, for the complements. This poem (if it's not obvious) is about my father that i haven't seen for...um...a long time, i'm pretty sure he remembers my name, but it's the poet's job to exaggerate. Spreading insanity, one post at a time |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This poem has a few lines that are exactly like paranoid android by Radiohead....anyway it's nice to see you back deranger. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Deranger Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498Somewhere, between here and there |
I know. But old words applied in new contexts become new words, no? Spreading insanity, one post at a time |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I love your style and your creativity. You have a way with putting words into wonderful meaningful lines. keep it up "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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