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Looking for the Answer |
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WaitN4AnAngel Junior Member
since 2001-03-08
Posts 37I wish I knew where I was... |
Knowing you cant help Knowing I cant stop Having no control Realizing I dont care Drawing away from everyone Including my best friends My world is being sucked away And I'm left in an endless black hole This is the life I wake up to each day Empty, pointless, yet somehow promising Promising that tomorrow I will wake To this same life... No surprises, just more emptiness More problems, more pain In my own little world I wander Looking for an answer that I wont find To the question that boggles my mind... Why??? *Me* |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
I really liked this poem. It's going in my library. I don't know if you are really fighting with these problems, but I know where you are coming from. Life just sometimes leaves you wondering WHY? What's the point? Hope things go better. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is a really good poem. It shows a lot of emotion. It looks like things are hard for you right now, so good luck with these things in the future. Just stay strong, and know that everyone battles with these questions too. Good job. --Marie I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am. |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This is a well-written piece. We all ask ourselves why, but if you take a moment to look at all the beauty that surrounds us, that answer is easily answered. Sometimes it's hard to see past the hate and anger of this world, but the beauty is always there if you look hard enough. Keep looking, my friend. God bless!  "Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli |
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luvnkris Member
since 2000-08-31
Posts 144Perth, Australia |
i'm sorry things are like this for you at the moment. but don't worry things will get better, i have a kind of policy that in life its usually a peak then a plummet then peak, etc... so don't stress ur peak will be soon enough! Luv Jo xoxo ps. keep ya head up! * never live a second without being grateful for all you have around you* |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Yes, if we look around at the things we have, the beauty that DOES exist, then, as Lovebug so eloquently stated, "that answer is easily answered."  But we all know what she meant.  Good job. Ending on a single word in the poem lays a lot to it. But the word you used has a lot of power. ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was really well written! I liked this one a lot. I do think you can get better though. there is still hope and you shouldn't lose it. Good luck!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
very well written i do believe though, that if you incorporate other styles to what you have now, you'll be awesome at it. Hope things are better for you now "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
I liked your poem, it was quiet good. Thats all i got to say. Regina |
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