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fozzyozzy
Member

since 2001-03-15

Posts 336
Lessburg Virginia

0 posted 2001-03-21 10:01 PM

The Blues

My genuine hand-written accompanyment
Grace this page in adornment
The flow is fee
The words not chosen
They choose me

Sadness and cheerfulness intertwined
Letters smashed in a vocabulary grind
Into feelings I soon lose
To represent
My feelings of the blues

A crick in my neck tells me
I've spent too much time in poetry
Maybe another outlet lies ahead
How else to record
Things I hear in my head.

"The heart can think of no devotion
Greater than being shore to ocean
Holding the curve of one position
Counting an endless repetition"
-

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

1 posted 2001-03-21 10:16 PM

NOOO!
Ozzy, man, you just GOT here! Don't ditch poetry yet!
Try other forms... maybe Haiku/Senryu? There are a whole bunch of them.....
hmm.... here's a nice list. http://poetic-endeavours.com/main/format_list.html
Try some of these.

~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2001-03-21 11:09 PM

Nicely done......but like allan said.....if you leave poetry we will all cry and throw hissy fits till the end of time.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

3 posted 2001-03-22 09:20 AM

"A crick in my neck tells me
I've spent too much time in poetry"

Don't leave! You are so talented, and reading your work is an enjoyable thing for so many people here. Good job on the poem... now don't leave!

--Marie

I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am.

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

4 posted 2001-03-29 06:48 PM

you can never spend too much time with poetry
keep sharing
and i mean that

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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