Teen Poetry #4 |
Droplets of Dew |
fozzyozzy Member
since 2001-03-15
Posts 336Lessburg Virginia |
Droplets of Dew Sparklets of water dropped at nigh sight Dizziness cast upon such a stormy night Shining like glass possessed Into a sidewalk river caressed Icy wind blasts with unnatural turmor Until God silenced resonates only a murmor Sprinkled droplets upon a fresh grass Given tonight things soon past Objects of dew and love never last. "The heart can think of no devotion |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Ah... quite a good poem. Had a lot of very good descriptions. A fine example of your talent, Ozzy. ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Very nice poem. I think this is my fav from you today. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I liked this a lot. Allan and Dopey said what I would have wanted to, so to avoid the risk of sounded repetitive, I'll just say this is very nicely written. Good job --Marie I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I thought this was written really good im actually really impressed with this one you've outdone yourself keep it up "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Deranger Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498Somewhere, between here and there |
Shining like glass possessed Excellant line! Spreading insanity, one post at a time |
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