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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden 
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Have you ever wondered why, we dream about the things, in life which may pass us bye, or flying without wings? Have you ever wondered about, what happens when your dreaming, all the people sometimes shout, and no one can hear you screaming? Have you ever wondered why, your dreams are your life, a place for you to cry, to escape all of the strife? Have you ever wondered why, whatever you are seeing, only ever seems to go by, when ever you are dreaming? I wish people would stop telling me that I can do anything I want to. I never thought that I couldn't. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nicely done here. I liked this very much! It's nice to see you posting Allysa!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Great job, Allysa! This piece is marvelous... every poem I read from you lately has displayed growth in your skill. I think you have been improving quite signifigantly. I have a critique--- the second line of Stanza 3 hampered the flow. It needs one more syllable. So throw a tiny word in somewhere. Other than that, a fantastic job. ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I do wonder these things. Im so fascinated by dreams so im constantly analyzing them. This was a great poem and a very creative topic! |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Thanks you three! I wish people would stop telling me that I can do anything I want to. I never thought that I couldn't. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I haven't seen you post much, but the last poems I have read from you portray lots of talent! Another very good poem. Nice job! --Marie I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am. |
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Ski*Chick Member
since 2001-01-13
Posts 141Fitchburg, Mass, Usa |
Good poem, I think it's pretty.  minna |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Thanks much ya all, I've been busy, with school, volleyball, musical practice, and guitar and all that fun stuff like choir, and keeping up with Justin, I'll try to write more. I wish people would stop telling me that I can do anything I want to. I never thought that I couldn't. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Boy, are you really inspired lately  I've loved your works lately beautiful Allysa, they're really beautiful "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
This is really pretty Allysa, i really like this poem. keep writing and posting Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
Allan is very right. you have improved alot. Its amazing stuff your writing. keep it up. regina a small cut is only the beggining of a life in pain |
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