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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
The Child Wandering through old monuments Not knowing their names or stories Skipping along cracked ledges Creating worlds within lorries I'm a kid; I don't know better I see fun, not danger or death A new sensation a strange thing On the back of my neck, warm breath The Cat Such a fun and furry creature Gazing at me blankly purring The thing is oddly alluring Harmless innocent still meow I reach out my hand to touch it Fur is so soft, the cat so still My finger cracks through its soft skull Clacking cockroaches crawl from brains The Genisis Running away from the relics Answering the call of mother Her mournful red eye peers at her "I told you never to run off!" "But mother! They're here, it's now time!" Great city of steel, shelter cold Safe and sound now ready to mold The future sweet and the past death.... "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Ohh... this was VERY cool. Definitely the best of the series so far. I liked "The Cat..." I really didn't know where you were going with that. Took me by complete surprise. All three were magnificent, still. Very very good job. Man... what is it with Teen #4 and our serieses lately? Well it's an excellent display of our skills, I must say. Soon, we'll ~all~ be making a series.  ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is very cool. I liked all three, they all show plenty of skill. Great job! And, I know what you mean, Allan, Teen #4 is on a role lately!  Great job, frac.--Marie I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Oh geesh.........this is kind of twisted. VERY VERY interesting. I like all three sections of this. The cat one freaked me out though haha. I liked it. Frac. your creative mind never ceases to amaze me. I like this series!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Thanks all for the replies. I think I didn't do as good a job technically as I have before. The cat section was the most challenging of them all, actually, lol. I'm glad it ended up being so praised by you. "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
*click* into the library. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Frac, do you mind coming over here and having some of that writing dust rub off on me? This series has been as interesting as watching bugs fly into those electric zappy things. OK, bad comparison but it has been fantastic so far. Definitely up there as one of your best pieces ever. Library piece I think. ~AF~ "It is not necessary to change. Survival is not mandatory." |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
A very interesting and thought-provoking piece, my friend. Very well-written. Thanks for sharing.  "Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli |
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