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Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

0 posted 2001-03-19 10:19 AM

The shadows on the wall,
Are growing larger each day.
When I step into the darkness,
I can make them go away.

Like a frightened child,
I hide in this dark place,
I'm safe in this loneliness,
And I can finally hide my face.

The times when light comes in,
And dances in the dark,
I want to keep the hope,
To hold on to that spark...

But it's so small that I wonder,
How do I keep it bright?
I want to help it grow,
And fill my life with light.

If the light returns,
Will the shadows too?
They shadows are why I run to hide,
From my life, from love and from you.

So here is where I stand,
I need to make a choice.
Should I quiver in the darkness?
Or reach within and find my voice?

I can fight those shadows,
Because they are not what's real.
But I have a broken heart,
And a broken soul that needs to heal.

It's time to face my fears,
Time to take a chance,
Time to mend my broken life...
And in the light I'll dance.

--Marie

I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

1 posted 2001-03-19 12:06 PM

Very positivive poem! I liked it! I know you are going through some tough times, but you must always have hope. Dance in the light, and if you need a partner don't hesitate to ask for one

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

2 posted 2001-03-19 12:49 PM

Absolutely fantastic Marie! This is definitely going into the library.
I hope your situation improves soon and don't hide in the shadows. They eventually consume you and that's not pretty ok.

~AF~

"It is not necessary to change. Survival is not mandatory."
-W. Edwards Deming

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

3 posted 2001-03-24 02:39 AM

"It's time to face my fears,
Time to take a chance,
Time to mend my broken life...
And in the light I'll dance"

I think you've figured out what you need to do. Never hide from your fears. You always have to confront it

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

Elvenblood
Member

since 2001-02-17

Posts 409
Maine, USA

4 posted 2001-03-24 09:09 AM

Wow, what a good poem, resilienc story, love it!

"Some men see things as they are and say why.
I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

5 posted 2001-03-24 01:29 PM

I loved the theme and questions to it.
But there were a few lines that hurt the flow... you had an amazing flow to begin with, I was mouthing the words as I read it.
But then you began making the last two lines of each stanza LONGER, and that was NOT a good idea. It made the whole outstanding flow you created fall to shreds.
But officially, it is a great poem. You expressed yourself well.

~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort

Linc

Senior Member

since 2001-03-07

Posts 552
The Backstreet Boy

6 posted 2001-04-08 10:06 AM

Hey,

Superb poem, I can't belive I missed it the first time but I found it now

Until your next masterpiece

-- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

banburycross
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since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

7 posted 2001-04-09 01:05 PM

I especially liked the last stanza of this one, beautifully written and very positive. this goes straight into the library.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

8 posted 2001-05-02 12:55 PM

*bump*page one

i really liked this poem..
and i never got to read it the first time around but..i thought this was jus amazing
keep writing

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

knightlyshadows
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since 2001-04-14

Posts 791
obscured vision

9 posted 2001-05-02 07:39 AM

thanx for bumpin it albert

this goes to me library! i love nething to do with shadows and you did this one wonderfully!!!

'The times when light comes in,
And dances in the dark,
I want to keep the hope,
To hold on to that spark...

But it's so small that I wonder,
How do I keep it bright?
I want to help it grow,
And fill my life with light.'

*sigh* thats me fav part right there *Points*
tiff