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Sweet Surrender (An oldie but a goodie) =p
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Sweet Surrender (An oldie but a goodie) =p |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA 
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I'm scared and alone Tired of being strong I long to let go Just for tonight I want some time To let it all finally sink in deep, to brand my fragile yet strong mind I want to surrender my stubborn soul And show raw emotion Without fearing to lose everything God, why is my heart afraid to sing to him When he's made it perfectly clear That he will never use what I say Against me nor ever leave me in this cold cruel world How much longer Do I need to keep up this brick wall Surrounding my soul Blocking all possible emotions That should be taking their toll Yet instead I no longer allow myself to cry But I'm afraid I'm going crazy With these nerves of steel I gave up my heart under my own free will To another human being Someone whose soul is rare and true But I'm lost, I no longer know what to do I get deeper and deeper letting time take its toll Is this truly love? These emotions, these needs Wanting to break down just for once To want to surrender to them Showing them that sometimes it's hard being strong And that you're just like them A human being.. Reaching out Searching, asking and longing for real love… "Let me be the one you call, if you jump I'll break your fall, lift you up and fly away with you into the night" ~Crash and Burn~ |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
This has been printed out and is in my room right now as I type this. It's amazing. Truly amazing. I can't believe it is on page two with no replies. Oh well, back to page one it will go. Thank you for this piece. It'll come in handy some day. ~AF~ "It is not necessary to change. Survival is not mandatory." |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is a really good poem, and the expression in it is beautiful. Nice job, it's going into my library! --Marie I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Oh wow!!! This was completely awesome! This was fantastic! I loved this poem! You've managed to express yourself VERY well! wowish  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
beautiful simply beautiful i love your way with words hope you keep posting more thanks for the read "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
That's so beautiful! :-) I absolutely love it! "Some men see things as they are and say why. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Very nice... but I've seen better from you.  Still, very nice. ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I really like this one a lot, great job on it! "Be kind, for everyone you meet is fighting a hard battle" |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
Hey Kris, This was amazing. I understand perfectly what you meant to say. -Adam "If life is so significant, then why do we die?" |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
*bump* just bc I can and plus I loves this poem, even though I wrote it a long time ago..but I'm sooo feeling it!! |
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