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DYME Member
since 2000-07-29
Posts 104Texas |
What I Am *3/16/01* You see my honey-brown skin -Ohh she so concieted You see my permed straight hair -She ain't real You hear the way I speak -She so stuck up You see the clothes I wear -She all up-itty You see me and my friends -she just perpitraiting You hear the music I listen to -She ain't a real sista You observe me closely, the things I do and the way I present myself. -She tryna be white. She ain't all that. Well if I ain't all that, why are you giving me all of your attention, spending all of your time looking at me and what I am? ----------------------------------------------------This is to prove to people that, it doesn't matter how you act, look, or speak. Just as long as you're respecting yourself and being true to yourself. NO WEAPON FORMED AGAINST ME SHALL PROSPER... ISAIAH 54:17 |
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fozzyozzy Member
since 2001-03-15
Posts 336Lessburg Virginia |
Cool structure in your poem. It kinda reminds me of Maya Angelou in a way. BTW, neat signature, sorta like...BAM! "The woods are lovely, dark, and deep |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I thought this was very different. I liked the style. I haven't seen you around, nice to meet you. I encourage you to post and reply more now that you're back in our wonderful home of poets and friends. I agree with the message and I think it's good that you stated it. Be true to yourself.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Very, very good poem DYME. Being true to yourself will always prevail over any other rubbish people try to put on you. Always do what YOU want and never fall victim to these ridiculous stereotypes society has to offer us. ~AF~ "It is not necessary to change. Survival is not mandatory." |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Oh this is perfect! I love this, if only half the people I know that judge others would change, I'd be the happiest person ever: I'm working on it! great job here "Some men see things as they are and say why. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Great style. It caught my attention and really gave a lot to the poem. Great job. Welcome to Teen#4. Again, good job on this. --Marie I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am. |
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DYME Member
since 2000-07-29
Posts 104Texas |
Thank You. I really enjoyed wirting it. I thought that I would put this one in the teen forum because I know that teens like me could relate to it more than any one else. NO WEAPON FORMED AGAINST ME SHALL PROSPER... ISAIAH 54:17 |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Good job on this piece.Very different style. I will be looking for more. Jon |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Ditto to Dopey's speech. (He's a big moderator now.  hehe...)This was an interesting style... you could have used a different way of expressing the hyphenated lines. Perhaps italics? Hit the "html help" button to find out how to use these. Great job, either way. Nice to meet you. ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
one thing...AMEN to your words of wisdom  "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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