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So Much Too Much
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So Much Too Much |
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fozzyozzy Member
since 2001-03-15
Posts 336Lessburg Virginia 
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I realized I've been posting a LOT lately, and I apologize. I was just so excited to find a place where I could post my poetry. From now on, I'll only post one poem a day so you don't get too bored with me. Here is the one for today. I'm proud of this one because I actually follow a rhyme scheme and pentameter  ----------------------------------- So Much Too Much Heartbreak everywhere Too much So much Doesn't anyone care Something is wrong Heard in every song Heartache around Pain and such So much Down on the ground Romeo and Juliet Not like them yet Loss wherever I see No escaping its touch So much That it has grasped me If we had a box Love behind its locks Everyone is crying Too much So much We could be flying Make an attempt with me Fly together then we'll see Mirror's reflecting Truth too much So much Is spent suspecting Lying to others Lies between lovers Loves now ending Loved you so much Too much With messages sending It's hard moving on Heard in every song Goodbye Like the rest Lost in the crowd Gone without a sound. "The woods are lovely, dark, and deep |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
You are cool. And that's a pretty kick butt compliment coming from me. So be grateful.  Nice work, I think I'm gettin to like ya..Oh yeh nice sig. Go Robbie!~Carly "The eye sees a thing more clearly in dreams than the imagination awake." |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I thank you for posting in accordance to the guidelines. It shows that you truly love this place by following the rules. I thought this poem was great, not as good as some of the others from yesterday, but a very well written poem nonetheless.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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fozzyozzy Member
since 2001-03-15
Posts 336Lessburg Virginia |
Myabe I'll start the whole "one-a-day" thing tomorrow You can't mess with inspiration "The woods are lovely, dark, and deep |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Exactly. If you mess with inspiration, you're in trouble.  I love the great flow you have running through this. As it was just so good, it is going into my library to be read over and over again. I await more pieces like this. ~AF~ "It is not necessary to change. Survival is not mandatory." |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I loved this one! Very nice work... I love the rhyme scheme and the style. Awesome job! --Marie I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
As everyone else has said, the rhyme is perfect. It's nice to know too that you're happy here in Passions. Post anytime you want, just don't exceed 3 in a day. Tell, you the truth it'll be better if you wait when your last post has gone down the line before you post again. You get more replies that way too "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Well I think it was OUTSTANDING. And yeah, follow guidelines or Lovebuggy locks up your posts. And that's never fun. ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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