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Yesterdays |
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fozzyozzy Member
since 2001-03-15
Posts 336Lessburg Virginia 
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Yesterdays So many houses Which one is yours I can see your face Behind each of the doors So goodbye yesterday I'm moving on In my own way I know what you'll say But say it anyway Because I want to hear You can't judge yourself There are already too many people That will label you on a shelf Why can't things be simpler Like yesterday Yesterday was a guarantee Yesterdays are anything you want them to be Time stopped though You're as pretty as I know We can stand in time As long as I can figure Another rhyme. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Not bad. I like the other one better though.  ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Allan, be quiet! I like this one a lot better! Anyway, I'm still looking for your first post! so I'll respond to that one more hopefully. "Some men see things as they are and say why. I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK |
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TearsOfPearls Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 322Vereeniging, South-Africa |
I thought this was a very well writtin poem. I liked it alot. Keep it up. Planning big can be a gamble...I have already rolled the dice! |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, Well I was going to say some comments on your poem but...they said everything I was going to so until your next poem -- Linc "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
ok fraknly I'm pissed off..... "Yesterday was a guarantee" That line completely rocked.....now explain....why don't *I* come up with lines like that?!?! Ok well about the poem, I thought it was pretty good, but Radio was better. Anyhow, nicely done!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
You did good on this one Thanks for the read Keep sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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