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Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

0 posted 2001-03-15 08:37 PM

I know that one day
All of this will be ancient history.
The present will soon fall into
The past and pull with it all
Of the confusion and wonder.
All of the discomfort and pain.
Believe me, I know.

I know that one day
I will look back on today.
I will see how lost I was
And I will cry for the memory of my old self.
Trust me, I have thought about it.

I sometimes wonder
How other people can be so lucky.
Some of them glide through the years,
Never feeling as if life and all its components
Are just not worth it--
Never knowing a tear of despair,
Or a smile of irony.
Take my word for it, I have envied them.

Still, I know.
I know with every ounch of sincerity,
That although it is hard--
That despite my soul being stretched and tugged
And beaten to its maximum capacity,
This is what it takes
To be real, to be wonderful,
And to be free.

I know that one day,
I will look back upon these
Words that I have written.
I will remember a time
When I felt that it was over.
That I could not give
A single thing more.
And I will shed not one,
But two tears.
A tear for knowing
That I was right all along,
And a tear for knowing that
I had it in me to survive.
Believe me, I have dreamt about it.

--Marie

i never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. i guess that just goes to show how wrong i always am.

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

1 posted 2001-03-15 09:24 PM

Great job, Marie. I loved how you reworded the same sentence in a few stanza to end them.
This was very creative and caught my eye.
The poem and message are also quite good.
Hope to see you posting more.
~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort

CLBinLOVE
Member

since 2000-06-04

Posts 147
Hilton Head, SC, USA

2 posted 2001-03-15 09:27 PM

it was pretty good, i especially like the first stanza
reminded me of a time long ago...anyway bout to go off on a tangent so ill stop

let the fighting words lie
let the candle light die
let the sun come up
let the same imply
~EvE 6

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-03-15 09:55 PM

I loved this!
W0hhoo's to yoU!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Linc

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 552
The Backstreet Boy

4 posted 2001-03-16 12:09 PM

Hey Fading Away,

This is yet another superb poem I really love reading your work and hope to see more of you poetry :) until your next poem (which is going to be soon right cause I can't wait its been like an hour since you posted your last poem :) )

-- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

sweetstuff101
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since 2000-07-27

Posts 375
OK, USA

5 posted 2001-03-17 10:46 AM

That was great!! I understand where you are coming from here...it's a very inspirational piece and I luv it!! Keep up the awesome work...and keep writing!!

lotsa luv,
~*~SweetStuff~*~

SuMdAy U'll CrY 4 mE bUt I wOn'T cRy 4 U, sUmDaY U'll MiSs Me LiKe I MiSsD U, SuMdAy Ull nEeD mE LiKe I nEeDed U, sUmDaY U'll lUv Me BuT I wOn'T LuV U

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

6 posted 2001-03-21 06:42 PM

you did a real good job
just don't assume though that others don't hurt too
who knows, they might be looking at you and feeling the same way
actually, even evying you the same time you envy them

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

LoveBug

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since 2000-01-08

Posts 4697

7 posted 2001-03-21 08:30 PM

"I know with every ounch of sincerity,
That although it is hard--
That despite my soul being stretched and tugged
And beaten to its maximum capacity,
This is what it takes
To be real, to be wonderful,
And to be free."

Wow... the wisdom you have radiates from this piece. Beautiful work, my friend!

"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli

DancinQueen

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since 2000-07-29

Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA

8 posted 2001-03-21 09:59 PM

very refreshing poem~i like how you hinted to the good side in the rough times everyone goes through in life. like its all worth it in the end...good message. great job

keep posting

*dq

¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤

fozzyozzy
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since 2001-03-15

Posts 336
Lessburg Virginia

9 posted 2001-03-21 10:05 PM

What else to say? Good everything

"The heart can think of no devotion
Greater than being shore to ocean
Holding the curve of one position
Counting an endless repetition"
-

WaitN4AnAngel
Junior Member

since 2001-03-08

Posts 37
I wish I knew where I was...

10 posted 2001-03-22 03:21 PM

I really like your poetry. I feel like I understand a lot of how you feel. Striving to be thin and perfect, but dont let that get in the way of who you are. Easier said than done I know, because its easier for me to say then live by, but just never give up who you really are!

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

11 posted 2001-12-11 09:59 AM

I am so happy that you survived

This piece is the best one I have seen so far so obviously it's going to the library.
The wording is great.
It's definitely sparked something in me.

Take care of yourself.

~AF~

"Always keep focus on your dreams because most often than not that's all you'll have." - Javier

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