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Cracks in the Floor |
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WaitN4AnAngel Junior Member
since 2001-03-08
Posts 37I wish I knew where I was... |
I originally wasnt going to stay, but someone among us convinced me, so here I am... I feel like my life is changing too much I dont know who I am anymore But the things that torment me stay clear While the things I love slip through cracks in the floor. I wish I could find a place To sit and sort out my mind Where nobody else is around to listen Where I may discover I dont have to live blind Where I can learn to love all things again To ignore the pain and tears Where I can regain my strength and will To forget the painful years In hopes of finding it in my heart To forgive those who have hurt me But can it, will it possibly happen Or will I forever be... Stuck in a world of hurt Can I find a way to be free Or is this the only world I can live in And the only person I can be... *Me* *If you don't stand for something, you'll fall for anything* *A smile is a curve that straightens out a lot of things* |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Maybe it's not a way of being free from the world, but your perception of it. Quite a negative poem, you're full of hopelessness within it. It seemed to me like you just needed to find a way to live happily, but couldn't find one after a few attempts. Don't give up......your chance will come again. Nice poem! I really thought it was quite good!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Ohhh! I LOVE IT!! :-) :-) :-) Especially the third and 5th stanzas!! They rule! But in all seriousness, I hope things turn out ok, and that you find that place of peace of mind. Fantastic poem though "Some men see things as they are and say why. I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Okay, Bryan.... just relax bro. *pats him on the back* I liked this one a lot myself. I am VERY glad you decided to stay.  ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
It's nice to know you decided to stay There is one place you can do these thing you would like to do. PIP  thanks for sharing again don't stop "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Oh good, all the people decided to stay. *celebrates* This was really depressing. Find that spot and make sure you sort everything out. I hope this situation becomes rosy for you. ~AF~ "It is not necessary to change. Survival is not mandatory." |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Ohh Carly likes this a lot...yes very a lot...and like they said, it's a bit depressing..but hey! How would we survive if the world was a whole buncha Mr. Rogers'? *shudders* Hope life gives ya a hug sometime soon. ~Carly "The eye sees a thing more clearly in dreams than the imagination awake." |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Good job, Carly... I like this one. I think this is one of the best I've read from you. Great job! --Marie I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am. |
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