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Message to a Forgotten Self
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Message to a Forgotten Self |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
I know this is a bit of a departure from the norm for me. It's a bit of a tongue and cheak message that I thought might be fun to write. Well, enjoy. I wish I could stay longer, friend, But things have gotten a bit harsh Now, going in circles to no end. I can't really find my way now. Oh yeah, God says hello again. So does everyone else as well. You thought life would be just great when You reached my age. What a laugh! Nobody exists anymore. It's just you and me now, I guess. All these problems are like a sore That just won't go away ever... It seems I won't be leaving afterall.... "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" -- Magus |
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TearsOfPearls Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 322Vereeniging, South-Africa |
I loved this poem...so true, keep it up  Planning big can be a gamble...I have already rolled the dice! |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
My, oh my.... Fractal, my friend, you did a marvelous job on this poem. I'm glad that you decided to share it. In all honesty, this "departure" was, although different, very good. "God says hello." I loved that part, made me laugh out loud. See you around. ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
It was ok.....not my preference but I like the departure from the norm. I thought that what you were trying to express was awesome, It just didn't connect with me. Anyway, hope to read more.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
Wow, looks like the expectations of genius I have for you are not unwarranted. Damn my spelling sucks this early in the morning...anyways great work. Very powerful work. Keep it up >¶Øʆ< |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Dopey: lol, to each his own, it seems. Allan: I am glad you liked it. About the God part, it's a subtle expression of that fear of a God who'd become internalized, and so the real God's been forgotten. I was inspired by the line in Matthew Good Band's song "A Boy and His Machine Gun," in which he says "The voices say hello." Poet On Acid et al: I am glad you liked this one. "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" -- Magus |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Ive given you so much praise already that I can't hink of any new ones anymore. Just keep posting my friend "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Yeah it gets a bit like that doesn't it, Acire?  Not quite up there with the rest of your wonderful masterpieces but it is still a nice change. Keep 'em coming. ~AF~ "It is not necessary to change. Survival is not mandatory." |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I agree that this one isn't your best, but still very good. Keep posting. --Marie I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am. |
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