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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia 
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Your words dominate my thoughts, And your face dominates my mind. This past weekend was quite possibly The best ever, And quite possibly, The worst. I don't know how much longer I can go Without seeing you, And it's only been two days Since I have been able To look deep into your eyes, And touch your face. I yearn to feel the safety of Your arms around me once more, And I yearn to hear your sweet voice Whispering beautiful words in my ear. I miss you more than words can say, And I find myself counting down the hours Until I will see you again. Is it so wrong to feel so strongly for you? I just met you days ago, But those days feel like a lifetime, How can one person make such an impact, On such a painstricken soul? You have done more for me than you will ever know. You have opened my eyes a little more, And you have helped me see myself, And the path I need to be traveling A little more clearly. I will be forever grateful For all you have done in my life. Until then, I will continue counting down the hours Until I see you once more. --Marie [This message has been edited by Fading Away (edited 03-14-2001).] |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Very wonderful poem, Marie! I liked the summary at the end especially. And I'll talk to you later! Welcome to Passions. You are going to love it here! ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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Tears of Glass Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 182Physically? VA.... Mentally? I'm not quite sure |
Welcome to passions Great poem [This message has been edited by Tears of Glass (edited 03-14-2001).] |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey Marie, Welcome to passions I am sure you will love being here its great. This poem was a superb first post. I hope to see more of your excellent poetry this poem and you are going directaly in to my library  until your next great piece. -- Linc |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked it. I thought you did well for the first post. Welcome to passions! I hope you enjoy your stay here and just as a regular thing I do.....I urge you to go check out TEEN EXPLORER......there's cake and S&V chips there.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
  WELCOME!!! Hey there Great first post. I hope you enjoy it here at the Teen forum. I can't wait to read more of your work!*dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
WaaaHOOO!!!!! Another one, guys.  I really liked this. Verynice. Verynice indeedy. I'm patiently awaiting the next post.~Carly "The eye sees a thing more clearly in dreams than the imagination awake." - Leonardo da Vinci |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Cute, Javier. Trying to get me there too?  |
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grey::tears Junior Member
since 2001-03-07
Posts 19lost within my mind |
hey, great first poem, Marie, and welcome to passions. ~alex A.K.S. "Never fear something, just because you don't understand." |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Hey! Welcome and all that onderful stuff... Great poem!!! I love it, and it's going into my library!! Thank you for sharing it, and I hope to read more soon! "Some men see things as they are and say why. I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK |
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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
Wow, I can't honestly say that form wise that was the best I've ever seen but I'm personally more concerned with the meanings behind stuff and that was a very powerful piece. And the form wasn't really all that bad but with a little practice I can plainly see you have the ability to do better. >¶Øʆ< |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
First off...WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!! I really hope that you like it here just as much as the rest of us do. You are a very talented poet and i cant wait to read more of your work so please, keep them coming!! |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!! Sorry it took me this long to read your poem I'll tell you what, you have really suttle way of expressing yourself This piece would make others melt Thanks for decidng to join our family here in Passions for Poetry. Hope you enjoy your stay. pls check your email "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
GOD I LOVE THIS POEM "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, I don't care what anyone says because I LOVE THIS POEM -- Linc "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
Your writing is so beautiful baby, i wish i had your talent. this is one of the first poems you ever read to me and it is still one of my favorites. i'm with linc, i love this poem. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
WELCOME!! LOL  Looking through your posts is always a gratifying experience. I do like this Marie. It shows you ALWAYS had talent and how far you have come as a writer now. "How can one person make such an impact, On such a painstricken soul?" ugh, I ask myself that every single bloody day. Thanks for posting this. Much enjoyed. ~AF~ "Always keep focus on your dreams because most often than not that's all you'll have." - Javier |
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