Teen Poetry #4 |
Haunting Me |
MidnightMaverick Junior Member
since 2001-01-15
Posts 35Duluth, MN, USA |
Haunting Me Images of you Haunting Me The sound of your voice Haunting Me The arguements we had Haunting Me The kisses we shared Why is it still haunting me after a year? Does it have to be like this? Will there be no conclusion to this unhappy fairy tale? Haunting Me You're still standing there Towering above me with the Bible in your Hand Saying this is how it has to be. You above me, Me below you. Haunting Me The way it should have been. It haunts me. It shall haunt me for the rest of my days. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I'm not sure if I catch the entire meaning behind this one or not-- perhaps this is a shot in the dark, but it would seem like you were separated from your lover, for one reason or another, and now find that he/she remains near you, "haunting" you, not allowing you to forget about what you once had. You sound impatient in this poem, perhaps because the poem is directed at this individual. Great emotions portrayed herein. If you would like a review rather than an amateur analysis, then this poem was great. You excellently captured and communicated whatever emotions remain, and have remained, in the last year or so. Welcome to Passions. I hope you do enjoy your stay, and our company. -Allan Eternal life without the darkness isn't life at all- it is a lobotomy. |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
wow~ im with allen in im not sure of the complete meaning to this poem, cause it almost seems as if it has a hidden meaning. but great job..i like it *dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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GirlsBestFriend Member
since 2000-12-27
Posts 71Planet Earth |
Welcome to Passions! nice one to begin with. I find Allan right. good luck! ~lotsa luv "Isn't it funny how to the world you are nothing? But then to one person..you're the world" |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Welcome to Passions Midnight Maverick! We're glad to see you joined our community of poetry and friendship. This is a great first post. Hope to read more! (ps ... check your e-mail) Best wishes, /Kit |
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a_little_girl Member
since 2000-05-08
Posts 307San Alejandro, HI, USA |
Wow...well done. Welcome to Passions MM. **No weapon will pierce my heart, no hand will be raised to harm me as long as I write.** ~a_little_girl |
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Dopey Dope
Moderator
Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Welcome to Passions! I'm kinda confused as to what is haunting you. At first i thought it was about a guy, but then bible references came into play and now im swinging from a guy to God. So which one? I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
I'm with Dopey. I thought it was a great first post, but the reference to God threw the meaning off for me. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Welcome to Passions < !signature-->Awesome first post, I hope share some more with us. Yes, some of us are left with questions, is that the way it's meant to be??? Nice job on this poem! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com [This message has been edited by Lakewalker (edited 01-17-2001).] |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Welcome To Passions!! This was a great first post and you'll make an excellent addition to the poets here at passions!! Great poem and i cant wait to see more so keep em comin! |
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