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Barelybreathing Junior Member
since 2000-04-26
Posts 46 |
Bitter memories suppressed so long Clouded thoughts ache the head Unsheltered road that's all I have Pitiful miseries are all I get Demons cling to my tortured soul Raging mad they tear me apart Uncultured words fill my mouth Blasphemy and curses echoes the earth Broken now I fall to the ground Limp and deflated A washed-out bum. 'The greatest thing in the world is to know how to be one's own.' ~Montaigne~ |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wow ... powerful writing Barelybreathing. Very visual and hits with an impact, well done!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Nice. It had an interesting style to it, and a content that made me shudder. Great job. ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Great job here. I liked it very much!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Hope things are better for ya your poem kinda gets me concerned thanks for the read "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I like this a lot.. but it kind of scares me too. I hope things get better for you. --Marie I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am. |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
WOW this is a great poem very poweful and its going straight to my library. Keep up the good work -- Linc "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
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Barelybreathing Junior Member
since 2000-04-26
Posts 46 |
Thanks all for your replies.. sam 'The greatest thing in the world is to know how to be one's own.' ~Montaigne~ |
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