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Have You Ever? (I'm Sorry)
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Have You Ever? (I'm Sorry) |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA 
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A very VERY dear friend of mine completely destroyed me not more than an hour ago. It's terrible, but htis poem helped a lot. And if she does check my poetry here: I'm so sorry Becky, I should have forgiven you. Have you ever had someone you love? Someone you don’t just love, not because you should But someone you connect with Have you ever had that person more mad at you than they’ve ever been mad before? So mad that they will tear you apart And then leave you for dead in a ditch, and come back days later sorry? Have you ever been equally mad at them when they come back? Who are they to do that to you, no matter what you did You thought you knew them better than that… Have you ever? Probably never But if you’re clever You’ll hate forever Have you ever thought what you did was wrong? To leave that person in the ditch and go home? And not think you’ll care when they show up at your door Have you ever cried for the person you hate? The person you closed your door on And reminded them of what they did to you? Have you ever realized how selfish it is to hate for hate? To be mad at someone for being mad at you? As hard as it is to say you’re sorry after such a thing you’ve done Have you really ever? Could easily be never But if you think you’re clever Don’t you dare do what I’ve done! If you ever feel like you’re a gaping hole of life Don’t vent it on the source of your strife Embrace that person, innocent as the dove Fill your heart and being with their warmth and love "Some men see things as they are and say why. I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Wow, nicely done here!!! This was awesome. I loved it......especially the "if yer clever" part......Oh my, very well done here. I truly enjoyed this one!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Pretty good. I liked the repeated rhyme in a few lines. Of course, you don't want me to go and praise the format, do you?  Well you expressed your ~emotions~ nicely here, Bryan. Good job.  ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
This was really well done. I understand being so mad at someone... even mad at them for the way they reacted when they were mad at you. I'm sorry you have to go through this. Jenn "I'm a big, big, girl, in a big, big world, it's not a big, big thing if you leave me, but I do feel, that I will miss you much..." Emilia |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
powerful poem~i really liked it. keep posting *dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
WOW!! That was a great poem. Good luck with the situation, I think I know what you're talking about...but I decline to give any advice, cuz I'm tired and don't feel like making anything worse .Bel |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
very emotional poem my friend things will get better a friend is a friend, learn to forgive each other that's what true friends are for "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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