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It took almost losing you
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It took almost losing you |
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Wicced_Witch Member
since 2000-02-06
Posts 110Clarksville, TN, USA |
My own fears and independance Is what tore us apart I was afraid of being hurt So I built a wall around my heart Some where over the years though I needed the bond that we had But you gave me the space I demanded That made me a little mad So I took my pain and anger Directed it all towards you Told myself you didn't care And eventually believed it to be true It saddens me to think That I could have been so wrong Now I can clearly see That you loved me all along It took almost losing you To finally open up my eyes It is funny how the distance Stengthened our family ties I no longer think I am alone In this scary, evil world One thing I am sure of I am still Daddy's Girl |
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Marshalzu  
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Err this one was great, I really loved the flow and I could empathise with it... well as much as you can... Marshal zu. Friendship may end in love but love in friendship never. |
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Kandi Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 354North of Hell |
Oooo I love the twist at the end..I thought this was about love...well I mean it IS but I was thinking more romantic love than family love ya know..errr okay moving on... This was very well written and very expressive. It flowed nicely. Definitely a worthwhile read  ~*Won't you come and hold my hand? This world has taken me as far as it can... without your smile.~* ~*If I never said I'm sorry, then I'm wrong, |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I like the twist at the end. Nicely done on this one. I liked it tons.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Wicced_Witch Member
since 2000-02-06
Posts 110Clarksville, TN, USA |
Just wanted to say thanks to everyone for replying. This is really special to me, sort of an apology to my dad for ever pushing him away. It suck that now that we are finally close again he lives over 8 hours away. |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
That was marvelous I'm very impressed with you writing I think this is the first I've read of yours And I like it a lot applauds "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
whoa this took a twist at the end~ i was thinking it would be about a boyfriend..then it says Daddy's girl. great job..kept me on my toes  keep posting*dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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