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ethel lahootie Member
since 2001-03-06
Posts 143SC, USA |
~this sorta sux  but hey i hope ya enjoy it  !~ I drift… I drift away Beyond time, beyond a place, beyond people I see only what I want to I look over the hate, the stress, the troubles of life Memories come into mind but they are pushed back Don’t think, do not think While I drift I hear faint voices in the distance, But they only become fainter I see visions, my paradise There’s a beach, white sand, crystal clear water My mind and eyes come back into focus I realize that the crystal clear water was really your icy blue eyes I never drift for long, And I imagine I never will The busy rustling and bustling of life will always catch up So I go along with you Go through another day Just to fall asleep in your arms and dream… But in reality I never dream, I only drift |
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Marshalzu  
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
I loved this, you have all these very distinct images and those not so distinct images which are left to the readers imagination, good piece of work |
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ethel lahootie Member
since 2001-03-06
Posts 143SC, USA |
thank ya...thanks for replying  you were the first to reply  ...im glad you like it! ~ethel l~  |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nicely done. i thought you expressed your thoughts quite well. This drift, I like it. Quite sad, but still.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Wow girl! You're really good at giving images. Drifting away to a place w/o Mrs.You-know-who..I wish.  Anyway, great poem!  Bel |
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grey::tears Junior Member
since 2001-03-07
Posts 19lost within my mind |
i really liked this, there was alot of feeling put into it. AKS |
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ethel lahootie Member
since 2001-03-06
Posts 143SC, USA |
thanks for replying glad ya liked it! bel: i was thinking about it...who is mrs you know who?  haha...there could be alot and i couldnt figure it out  thanksdopey: glad ya liked it...yah it is sort of sad  now that i think about it...thanks! thanks yall |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
i'm very impressed ethel your first poem that i've read and i'm in awe well done "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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ethel lahootie Member
since 2001-03-06
Posts 143SC, USA |
thank ya much! if you could please call me jo or joey or something like that...reading ethel on the thing is weird...thats not my real name ~jO~ "i remember running through the wet grass falling a step behind both of us never tiring desperatly wanting" ~better than ezra...desperatly wanting |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Jobethelica- I know u know, but for future reference, Mrs.You-know-who is Snra. Española....(won't finish that) I'm so mean!! Bel |
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