Open Poetry #12 |
boulder |
dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
my shoulders are heavy... in my head has been dropped a boulder bearing down upon my neck crushing my fragile shoulders i become old as the wieght suffocates the youth of me there is no time to feel the pain there is no time to purge the tears as i am slowly being poisoned to a death that does not become me i could scream but who would hear this weight is overpowering i am tired too tired to fight this familiar battle i lay down in the blood of me where once i shed the tears and i close my eyes.. those who will come to see will call me old... -dgvarner 1-24-01 "...beyond the door, theres peace i'm sure...and i know there'll be no more tears in heaven..." clapton |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
very dark, nice lines in here... thanks for the read |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
thanks for reading DOREEN.. hugs, g |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
What an awful weight of sadness in this poem, Gale! I especially liked the last lines. How true that burdens can make us appear old before we attain old age! To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Oh this is so filled with lamentations. Fallen Rain, is it autobiographical in any sense? Do you wish prayer? Such a fervent moaning is present here. Let us know. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
YOU OLD!???????!!! I think not. Powerful verse of realization to THOSE of us who are really there. Wonderful writing and great choice words carrying much impact. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(tears coming down my cheeks) Oh, this poem is filled with such immense pain and sorrow. Oh, please don't say that, please don't say that at all. Your heart speaks of a wisdom that shines with the liveliness of youth and happiness. You mean so much to us all, we love you all so much. Now may love and light overcome all and raise your shoulders and toss that boulder like a discus. I pray all this pain is replaced by love very soon (sniff) Thank you for sharing, my friend! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
MAR..some days..in some ways...i do feel so very old... thanks for reading.. VAS..prayers always welcomed..thank you i thank you MARK..but some days.... thanks for reading.. MISTLETOE..wow..thanks so much for such kind words..and for the sort of 'virtual prayer'.. the sun will shine again.. hugs, g "i was thinkin' if you were lonely maybe we could leave here and no one would know at least not to the point where we would think so..." |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
dg, very very heavy poem. Great write. Hugs. Parker |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
PARKER..heavy upon my shoulders, yes... thanks for the hug..needed hugs, g |
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