Open Poetry #12 |
Broken |
WinterTalon Member
since 2001-01-14
Posts 141Brooksville, KY, USA |
Spirit broken, heart denied, Unconscious greed dissatisfied. Horrid loathing, sad defeat, Life no more, mind deplete... Yeah, it's short... that should make ya happy! ~The hardest thing is watching the one you love... love someone else.~ |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Residing residue remains reminding hearts how hellish hurt hovers taking tender thoughts to the throws and acknowledging anguish angrily ================== Let it out and then find the sunshine in your day and pen tomorrow. Short but alot said and with style I might ad. |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Well' Sad alright... but I found some battleship gray spray... we might have to find some multi-colored houses but that's not so hard. There everywhere. Do you paint as well as you write..? dale |
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WinterTalon Member
since 2001-01-14
Posts 141Brooksville, KY, USA |
Thanks, Mark... thank you very much I told ya I wasn't artistic, dale. But is it a crime to try? ~The hardest thing is watching the one you love... love someone else.~ |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
This is cool! Said a lot in just a few words. Sauni Sauni :) Have you ever known the color grey when the nighttime finds you weak I have, I've walked that road each time; that's where my angel sleeps |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Excellent. You've expressed your feelings sharply in this. Nicely penned. Poeminister |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
An awful lot is often said in a few words... you did so here. *S* Well done! |
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Amature2 Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 416 |
PoeticEnchantress "WOW" few words but strong one too. "Spirit broken, heart denied" Is when poets begin to write. Amature2 |
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WinterTalon Member
since 2001-01-14
Posts 141Brooksville, KY, USA |
You are so right, Amature2... And thank you all very much for your comments! ~The hardest thing is watching the one you love... love someone else.~ |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Short, but sad, which is sweet. |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
POETIC..very nice write..i often find that if i use too many words, i just repeat myself...short is good hugs, g "...beyond the door, theres peace i'm sure...and i know there'll be no more tears in heaven..." clapton |
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