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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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Deep Blue Deep was the blue of his intimate eyes Like mountain blue mirror lakes capturing skies And piercing and steady as sharp needled darts That could disarm your caution and penetrate hearts Soft was the turn of his rapturous smile That smothered the notion of any denial His lips were the sparks of a kindling fire His eyes were the jewels of romantic desire He stood like a statue of warm blooded mass And stared through my being as though it were glass The efforts to put up my usual guard Were dispelled by a heart that was thumping too hard As I walked past him clumsily tripping along The blue of his eyes sang a passionate song His smile hummed a sweet tender love lullaby And then from my lips came a bungling “HI!” He was charming, endearing, enticing and hot But that was the closest that I ever got But the blue of his eyes were like deep mountain pools So deep they were drowning ingenuous fools Elizabeth Santos |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Elizabeth...this is going into my library, and I can't say much more than that....you've left me speechless, once again! Especially that last line...wow... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Deep was the blue of his intimate eyes Like mountain blue mirror lakes capturing skies And piercing and steady as sharp needled darts That could disarm your caution and penetrate hearts ==================== He was charming, endearing, enticing and hot But that was the closest that I ever got But the blue of his eyes were like deep mountain pools So deep they were drowning ingenuous fools =================== my oh my ... does he have a brother LOL ... Oh I love this Lizzie ... your cadence danced off the page ... and the imagery ... mmm mmm mmm  very cool poem my dear ... and yes..as Sun said...that last line...WOW!! Poetry is not an opinion expressed ... It is a song that rises from a bleeding wound ... or a smiling mouth. ~Kahlil Gibran~ |
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angelswing Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705United Kingdom |
Oh my good, where do you get this stuff from, your truly outstanding, I say this every time, and every time, you just make me come out and say it again . Oh and don't tell me, the heart right ? This poem is so good, I can't even start to do it justice with words . I could write a book about this poem and still have plenty of content to finish a trilogy on it ! Thank you so much for putting this massive smile on my face, it's just what I've always wanted . L.of.L. Tommy . XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX Don't try, do or do not, there is no try . - Master Yoda - |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
This is awesome!!! All I can say is you rock...this is going into my library. The flow of this, word choice, all of it is simply amazing. Excellent write!! Take care Amy  |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Elizabeth , The imageries and descriptions in this are wonderful. Beautiful written. Poeminister "At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet." -Plato |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy the read |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
*~~~*~~~*~~~*~~~*~~~*~~~*~~~*~~~*~~~*~~~* Deep was the blue of his intimate eyes Like mountain blue mirror lakes capturing skies And piercing and steady as sharp needled darts That could disarm your caution and penetrate hearts *~~~*~~~*~~~*~~~*~~~*~~~*~~~*~~~*~~~*~~~~* This is awesome! Deb |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
I struggle to find the words that I may post into this reply so all I really can say to you PoetFriendElizabeth is a gracious thank you for an exceptionally captivating read... *~coco~* |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
"He stood like a statue of warm blooded mass And stared through my being as though it were glass The efforts to put up my usual guard Were dispelled by a heart that was thumping too hard" "He was charming, endearing, enticing and hot But that was the closest that I ever got But the blue of his eyes were like deep mountain pools So deep they were drowning ingenuous fools" Liz, I type this reply with tears in my eyes. I can relate to this SOOO well. I have lived every single word in this piece. You describe the love and sadness beautifully. This is going on my bedroom wall. Thanks for sharing. "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Some people just have that certain something, and they are captivating! Beautiful poem Elizabeth! |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
Wow!!!! This is truly great writing...I agree that this is a keeper Pepper "A poem is the very image of life expressed in its eternal truth." Percy Bysshe Shelley |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Oohhh, the rapture, the deep blue rapture! Very nice write, Liz. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
this is beautiful and precious. |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
whooo eeee "drowning ingenuous fools" as if the rest of the poem weren't already 5*'s you crowned it with these words! Fabulous = (subtitled Paul Newman ? ~G~) |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Could we have possibly known the same guy? I'll never forget him.....hmmmm.....I wonder whatever happened to him? Great poem, Elizabeth! Denise [This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 01-23-2001).] |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Superb, titillating, hauntingly endearing. Beautiful. So very sensual and engulfing. |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
The consistency of the beauty of your poetry is amazing. Thank you for sharing your wonderful gift. |
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