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Ode to the Obstinate
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Ode to the Obstinate |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California 
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ODE TO THE OBSTINATE As Deviance may spark the light Where Darkness never dawns, In fractal admiration from A thousand useless pawns; Upon the dreamless seas of Hope Waves of misguided trust All drift away through slow decay Till once again they're dust! As tired eyes befall shadow, Lo, Sanctuary's bliss, There comes a reckoning of shame For all we've seemed to miss. Reality, as white hot steel, May scald the plaintiff's eyes, But who, yet there, by dawn would dare Step forth to claim that prize? And who should give Reason to Pause, If in truncated thought? Or stand to gain from stale applause Of the weak and distraught? Or claim Freedom within the chains Of the unbidden mind? To never see by gelded reigns By all accounts, they're blind! Michael anderson But dreams of those who dream as I, Aspiringly, are damned and die. EAP |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Sanctuary's bliss. Yes, this is a fine poem, Michael. Kathleen |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
As tired eyes befall shadow, Lo, Sanctuary's bliss, There comes a reckoning of shame For all we've seemed to miss. Reality, as white hot steel, May scald the plaintiff's eyes, But who, yet there, by dawn would dare Step forth to claim that prize? ================== very very cool M, perfect pitch and cadence ... it picked up pace building to the ends impact very cool phrasing and vocab, as well as the stark imagery "In fractal admiration from A thousand useless pawns;" what a way cool line ... what a way cool poet  outstanding writing, as always obstinate? ..is that a poetic word for consistant Poetry is not an opinion expressed ... It is a song that rises from a bleeding wound ... or a smiling mouth. ~Kahlil Gibran~ |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Well done Michael...it is always a pleasure to read your poetry! |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Michael #1 It is so glad to see your work again. I have missed it and you...#2 as always your work is simply amazing. i have yet to find another who writes with your style and grace. you truly are unique!! and i mean that in the best way possible. take care...and keep them coming hehe. amy  "A friend is someone who knows the song in your heart and can sing it back to you when you have forgotten the words." |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
WHY AM I LAUGHING???? This is a beautifully penned poem, written with your customary artistry, you KNOW I love your work, but for some reason this morning (oh. afternoon.) I find this amusing....I think methinks I will read this one aloud to "HIM" lol...just so I can see that "deer caught in headlights" look and hear him say "huh?" Oh. THAT'S why I'm laughing....lol...thank you michael. |
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AniKay83 Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 388Missing Since 1999 |
It just flows so perfect. Totally enjoyed this! "Hearts will become practical when they make them unbreakable" ~The Wizard of Oz Much love all, Krissie |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
This is wonderful! Let's hope the obstinate appreciate it...I know I did!  |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
excellent writing, michael... nice to see you back on the boards... missed you |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Michael, I admire your talent for many reasons, but what strikes me about this is your dead-on accuracy and consistency in style. I see many poets attempt to write in a formal, period style, and they usually waiver. Not you, not ever you. And hey, who you callin' obstinate (said the Taurian)? Corinne |
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emmalouise Junior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 26 |
Michael, Wow. I don't know what to say. (Read Corinne's response...she wrote what I was thinking!) Wonderful stuff... emma |
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Elizabeth
Moderator
Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Welcome back, Michael, nice to see you here again. Loved the poem too. Hope that I'm obstinate enough to appreciate it. |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Michael, Good to read you again. Excellent writing. Poeminister "...no single sound too rude upon thy slumber shall intrude, Our thoughts, our souls- O God above! In every deed shall mingle, love." -Poe |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Irish Rose, Sanctuary probably would be bliss for most of us, if we only knew where to truly find it. Janet Marie, didn't feel so cool when I was writing it, but I'm glad you enjoyed. Sunshine, ditto Amy, I am trying to spend a little more time writing presently - I will try to keep something worthwhile in view for all of you. It's great to see/hear from you again as well. Always glad to see you smiling. serenity, I'm glad I got you laughing with this one. There was a tinge of sarcastic humor it, I really felt alot of people might read this and see someone in there. Just don't tell "him" where I live... LOL AniKay83, A pleasure to make your acquaintance, glad you enjoyed. PdV, I'm sure the truly obstinate would know this could not possibly be for them... LOL Doreen, one of these days we'll all have to get together again somewhere back there. Miss you all too. Corinne, Taurian huh? Yikes. Most likely I was just calling myself obstinate here, truly, though I would have to admit to having used a few others as easy reference... LOL No names to ever be revealed. emmalouise, Nice to meet you. So glad you enjoyed the read. I will look for some of your work as well. Elizabeth, well, I can safely say you were NOT one of the obsinates that may have influenced this piece, but I still hope you can appreciate it. Poeminister, you praise always mean much to me, thank you. And thank you all for the kind replies. Michael |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Michael? uh...I don't KNOW where you live! lol and hugs |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Excellent writing, as always, Michael! It's nice to see you here again! Please post more! Denise |
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Swamp¤Faeryie Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 393fairyland....of course;) |
ooooooh this is a good one!!!! I like the idea...."ode to the obstinate",a trait that runs deep in my family...heehee. Well as always,awesome poem,geez how do you do that?? sammi Do i contradict myself?Very well i contradict myself.I contain multitudes.~walt whitman |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
This is great!! I'm sure you're right though, they really wouldn't see themselves in this. psst...serenity I know where he lives.  j/k really, truly I don't LOL |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
For the "obstinate", eh?... It certainly does seem that those for whom its most fitting refuse to see themselves, doesn't it??... You do put it aptly, my friends...  |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Michael, it's always so pleasing to read your work when I visit. Your understanding and gift of language is quite refreshing. This is superb. Thanks for it. Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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