Open Poetry #12 |
Storm Colors. |
Wintersilence New Member
since 2001-01-21
Posts 2 |
Colors muted, the storm front gathers against your window, small specks of water, scattering against the pane, softening the pain, of the alone you feel tonight. You remember me, in all the myriad shades I was, throwing color on you, tossing love to you, careless in my ways, my memory stays in you, you watch the rain harden, pushing against the pane, sounding out your pain, as you ache alone again tonight. You see within the rain-slashed darkness, the moment we were, the single instant we caught each others breath, left smeared kisses on linen sheets, the rain is a steady drumming, against the pane, and the pain in you makes small sounds escape your throat, your alone becomes a physical sensation, leaving you weeping on your knees, your alone calling from the whipping trees, I flash in your eyes with the lightening. You listen to the storm your life's become, I was the only one who could see through you, see to you, I held the gentle beast in you, and crooned love, and made love, and now the rain is easing, scattered droplets teasing against the pane, running slowly through your pain, you listen for me in the storm, but I'm fading, the memory fading, the storm over over love. |
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WinterTalon Member
since 2001-01-14
Posts 141Brooksville, KY, USA |
Ow, painful first. But first times are always a pain, huh? This one touched me... Felt pain... ~The hardest thing is watching the one you love... love someone else.~ |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
this is awesome..wonderful first post! will look for more of you in the blue pages hugs, g "i was thinkin' if you were lonely maybe we could leave here and no one would know at least not to the point where we would think so..." |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A strong piece for an entrance into Passions! Welcome, and check your e-mail for a special message! [This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 01-21-2001).] |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
very well captured with your heart, I love the Irony of the storm. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
You see within the rain-slashed darkness, the moment we were, the single instant we caught each others breath, left smeared kisses on linen sheets, the rain is a steady drumming, against the pane, and the pain in you makes small sounds escape your throat, your alone becomes a physical sensation, leaving you weeping on your knees, your alone calling from the whipping trees, I flash in your eyes with the lightening. ================ this is awesome writing... WELCOME to Passions.. you have made a most poetic and wonderful first impression with this impassioned poem so nice to meet you take care jm Poetry is not an opinion expressed ... It is a song that rises from a bleeding wound ... or a smiling mouth. ~Kahlil Gibran~ |
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wandering Member
since 2001-01-21
Posts 92 |
beautiful poem..winter...achingly beautiful lost in thought, found in words. wanderer |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
An excellent entree... Thank you for this captivating read *~coco~* |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Welcome to Passions! You made a great entrance with this powerful poem. All I can say is wow! I look forward to more verse from your pen~ Take care, Melissa The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Welcome to passions with these wonderful hearfelt entrance ...showing your feelings quite well. wonderful piece. ((hugs)) Charisma |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Welcome to Passions and thank you for sharing this beautiful creation from your pen and heart. It is wonderfully written and holds much emotion behind it that I am sure alot (if not all) of us can relate to. I look forward to reading many more of your works in the future. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Welcome, welcome - and WOW... your first entry had a power about it...and great manipulation of words and rhythm... K |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
WinterSilence~ Welcome to Passions family of poets. A stunning render to mark your entry into our circle of friendship. Will enjoy more from you I am sure. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Welcome to passions, powerful write hope to see more of your work. write on Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Frankie Member
since 2001-01-10
Posts 57 |
Wintersilence - Great write, I could feel the emotion in your writing both times I read it.....Welcome to Passions. Frankie |
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Wintersilence New Member
since 2001-01-21
Posts 2 |
My thanks to you all for such a warm welcome to the passionate forums *smile*. |
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Temptress
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
WOW! and welcome.. Are you reading my mind? |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
This is outstanding writing...very visual...welcome to our world |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Welcome to the family! I'm impressed with the beauty of your first post here. I hope you enjoy your stay, read and reply along with us! |
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