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of the mind--collabaration w/Lone Wolf
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of the mind--collabaration w/Lone Wolf |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA 
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the thoughts in her head that were once childlike dreams have now given way to adult nightmares flying, flowing, flittering about she hears them in the silences between the beats of her once red heart now emptied of color it lies black, black as night but her mind still remembers a time when the world was a warm happy place her heartbeat strong full of love full of life the sweet smell of a flower garden blossoming in the spring bursting forth with every color of the rainbow reds, yellows, blues, greens, pinks, purples surround her soul but that was before before all of this before the darkness that covered her eyes before the color of night filled her rainbow the blackindigo spirit presence matching the blackred of her heart a cold wind blows through this place now this quagmire of loss and pain that is her home they're with her now all of her old friends pain hurt loss anger anguish she knows them all too well they open their arms to her although she embraced them for a brief time she knows the moment has come to conquer her fears once again, life and love take her gently by the hand guiding her down the primrose path her heart beats true as family and friends shower her with compassion she draws strength from them her once empty heart now overflowing once again she walks with her head high with the grace, dignity, and honor she harbored all along alas, she is free -------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Mr.Magoo Member
since 2001-01-20
Posts 104 |
The two of you ahve done a exceptional job on this write. I feel the deep sorrow in the begining and a sense of freedom in the end. Nice Job. Mr.Magoo |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Lone Wolf and Sven: My gosh~ You two penned such a deeply sorrowful, yet a hopeful, beautiful poem. I relate very much. Wow ~ Sven, you really are exploring your dark side  This poem flows perfectly, and the presentation really enhances the emotion.Take care, Melissa The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LoneWolf~ and Sven~ What a working together of hearts. So intense in the beginning - so free at the end. Wonderful collaborative offering, my friends. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Well, it's a wonderful poem! You work well together!  |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
It's beautiful. Kathleen |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Sven love, Lone Wolf, this is utterly amazing, this is an amazing piece it has an excellant unity, really truly wonderful. One of the best either of you have ever written, and it is outstanding. Wonderful work from both of you Take care love Mushy Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Lone wolf and Sven, seamless! IWIHWT. write on Keth Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Thank you all my friends. . . and thanks to Lone Wolf for her help and her ideas on this one. . .  ---------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
The two of you made a beautiful collaboration. Very deep and dark and beautiful. Sandra |
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athena4 Senior Member
since 2000-12-10
Posts 622 |
Sven and Lonewolf, You two are a literary dream! I really loved this. Love, Elise |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Thank you all for your replies and comments. This is the first poem Sven and I have ever written together. Sven . . . Thank you for asking me to write this one. You are welcome for the ideas, but you had some good ones yourself. Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I sincerely hope that you two will duet once again for us... this was wonderful! |
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