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There is no El Dorado
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There is no El Dorado |
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LoveBug
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***If you don't know, El Dorado is the mythical city of gold that the Spainards thought was in South America.*** So young, so full of life I was When he took me in his arms He had to say goodbye then He was going to El Dorado The old city of lore Full of gold and love… Our love would flourish there, he said As soon as he found it, he would send for me Day floated by, then months and years Without a word from him I decided, then, to find El Dorado There were many mountains to climb I climbed them all With the vision of a city of gold With the vision of my golden lover Always in my eyes As I reached each summit Hoping to see gold gleaming All I saw were more mountains Which I took on Higher Was Summit Each As My Spirit Sunk Lower Each Day One summit, I saw an old woman Although she was blinded, I asked “Old woman, where is the city of gold? Where is this land of perfect love and golden dreams? Where is El Dorado?” She looked at me with sightless eyes Though she saw much more than I She smiled, then laughed and cackled and said “There is no El Dorado!” I refused to believe the old woman’s words I climb the mountains in a frenzy Thinking that it must be just beyond the horizon But with each summit I climb All I see are more mountains to conquer And no secret city of gold I sink to my knees Feeling the snow below them Instead of the glimmer of gold Feeling the cold wind Instead of my lover’s arms Realizing the unbelievable Instead of the relief of reaching the goal There is no perfect human love There is no golden dream There is no earth-bound city of gold... There is no El Dorado < !signature--> "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav [This message has been edited by LoveBug (edited 01-20-2001).] |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Erica, El Dorado is in each of us..we are the gold that is sought...our hearts hold it. Lovely!! |
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GirlsBestFriend Member
since 2000-12-27
Posts 71Planet Earth |
to me this one is great! love it alot. best wishes. ~lotsa luv "Isn't it funny how to the world you are nothing? But then to one person..you're the world" |
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WinterTalon Member
since 2001-01-14
Posts 141Brooksville, KY, USA |
Kinda reminds me of the country song "There is no Arizona"... I think that's what it's called. Those kinds of stories/poems/songs always get to me. *sniff* ~The hardest thing is watching the one you love... love someone else.~ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LoveBug~ The hills of El Dorada is a nifty metaphor ! I like your inspiration for this piece. Nicely done. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
very cool write LB ... excellent imagery ... a well done weave...with a cool presentation and format great writing.. unique and creative!!! take care jm When to the sessions of sweet silent thought, I summon up remembrance of things past ... I sigh the lack of many a thing I sought. ~Shakespeare~ |
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LoveBug
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Sharon- I hope you always keep your El Dorado Girls- Thank you for your kind compliment Poetic- Thanks! Can't say that I've heard that song. Not much into country! Marge- This one just wouldn't leave me alone, so I had to write it. Thanks JM- Your opinion means a lot to me. Thanks for replying. "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
This one kind of puts me in the mind of that new country song "There Is No Arizona" Sometimes we want what doesn't exist and it's hard to tell ourselves otherwise...not an easy place to be  ~ Ruth www.angelfire.com/pa/OriginalMinds/index.html |
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WinterTalon Member
since 2001-01-14
Posts 141Brooksville, KY, USA |
Hehe, you may not know the song, but at least Hoot Owl here knows of it. I don't listen to much country but because I live in a very small, boone dock town, I hear it. It's a very sad song... ~The hardest thing is watching the one you love... love someone else.~ |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(sigh) Oh, but dear, we all have the magic of El Dorado deep inside our hearts, within a heart of gold. If you nurture it, it will forever shimmer with greatness. Love is like El Dorado. Excellent poem, my friend, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
Great write! Love the story in this A golden poem forsure!  |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Love Bug...What a story you have written here...I was thinking I'd write someting, using the country song, "There is no Arizona" as a guide, and yes, there is no El Dorado either, just you and the ground you walk on...and I think that is probably a lovely place. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Fine piece of writing...pulls one along like your hope had. Let me echo Poet DeVine, please. |
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LoveBug
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Gosh, I'm going to have to find this song to see what it's all about! Thank you all for your comments. "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
This was a wonderful piece to rest my eyes on and the inspiration was tremendous. I loved the format you penned and of course it goes without saying the imagery was superb. Loved it completely. FYI-The song "There Is No Arizona" is by a country artist by the name of Jamie O'Neil and it is on her first and only album.(as far as I know it to be) If you get CMT where you live just turn it on and you will see the video and believe me, it is well worth seeing and listening to. [This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 01-21-2001).] |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Hi Lovebug, Truly an inspired writing, and well done. But there is an El Dorado, I believe that it is in our heart. BC |
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Elizabeth
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since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
See? I TOLD you this was good!  |
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