Love-Struck Romeo - A sequel... I'll remain

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Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

0 posted 2001-01-19 08:34 AM

My frantic love song slipped,
Slipped through the winter night,
Slipped gently caressing,
Caressing the dark night,
Caressing mistily,
With love's endearing might.

My unwritten words dressed,
Dressed the moon with music,
Dressed tunefully singing,
Singing the symphony,
Singing melodiously,
With love's endearing rhymes.

My unsketched sketches drew,
Drew the fairies to sigh,
Drew cheerfully breathing,
Breathing the masterpiece,
Breathing rhythmically,
With love's endearing strokes.

Then I saw you floating,
Floating above the sky,
Floating freely singing,
Singing the songs of love,
Singing enchantingly,
With love's endearing tunes.

Then I let the summer
Sun of my lovesick dreams,
Shine and come out to play
A symphony of love,
In a gentle caress,
With love's endearing light.

In my love for you, I live;
In my life for love, I be;
In my being there, I am;
And I'll remain always -
Till forever flashes
A neon light of end.

-~-

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

1 posted 2001-01-19 09:07 AM

THIS READ LIKE SHAKESPEARE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1

Kathleen

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2001-01-19 09:30 AM

Sudhir, you have a remarkable write here sir....well done!

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

3 posted 2001-01-19 09:54 AM

Sudhir,
You are bewitched, take an asprin and call me in the morning. The poem was a delight. Sy

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

4 posted 2001-01-20 02:01 PM

Sudhir,
Delightful poem. Was it a touch sad? It felt it.
Anyway BTTT so others can feel it too.
Kethry

Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen.

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

5 posted 2001-01-20 02:41 PM

Sudhir lovely words and images...James

kcsgrandma
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since 2000-09-24

Posts 1522
Presque Isle, ME

6 posted 2001-01-20 11:47 PM

I enjoyed the way you've structured this, with the repetitions. It is a wonderful love song.

To love another person is to see the face of God.
- Les Miserables

Marilyn

Mark Bohannan
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since 2000-06-21

Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song

7 posted 2001-01-21 12:59 PM

My friend, you have just made this a very special night for me. This was truely lovely and of course you know how much I have always enjoyed your works. I know that I have missed some and please know that it is only because of my time not being what it used to be.

Paula Finn
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since 2000-06-17

Posts 5546
missouri

8 posted 2001-01-21 01:04 AM

LOve struck Romeo indeed...this is a perfect love song

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

9 posted 2001-01-21 06:32 AM

My unwritten words dressed,
Dressed the moon with music,
Dressed tunefully singing,
Singing the symphony,
Singing melodiously,
With love's endearing rhymes.

My unsketched sketches drew,
Drew the fairies to sigh,
Drew cheerfully breathing,
Breathing the masterpiece,
Breathing rhythmically,
With love's endearing strokes.
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very cool write Sud ...
very cool use of metaphor and phrases...
so romantic poet sir ...
and its so nice to see your name here

wonderful writing
jm

When to the sessions of sweet silent thought,
I summon up remembrance of things past ...
I sigh the lack of many a thing I sought.
~Shakespeare~

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant

since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

10 posted 2001-01-22 05:21 AM

Thank you all so very much for all your kind and affectionate words...

I wish I could respond to each of you individually...

All my regards,
Sudhir

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