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Ribbon Of You
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Ribbon Of You |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song 
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Ribbon Of You I awoke to the silent harmonies of dawn Watching the day creep across the lawn Soothing rays of warmth spreading light To the beauty hidden in shelter of night Chic-a-dees flittering in magnolia trees Nuthatches dancing in morning breeze Naked oaks stretching towards the sky Awakened by the hawks screeching cry Needles of pines showering in the wind As shadows of the day slowly descend Mornings song of promise being sung Across a sky where billows are strung Perfumes of love glide across my nose In the morning breath of scented rose Fish begin jumping in the valley stream The rebirth of life is all it would seem This day would be perfect in it's glow With God's gifts I have come to know All unwrapped in this mornings dew If only it came with the ribbon of you Mark Christopher If you find yourself stranded in a storm ...then reach for my hand and we will play in the puddles together |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
This is simply gorgeous..and has to be one of my favorites Mark..loved it..  ~V~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
And like a beautiful package of the heart's gift that this is, it shall dwell with the ribbons encasing the finest volume of poetry...ever... and reside in my library... |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Mark~ Breathtaking comes to my mind while reading this.......then I get to the end and simply *SIGH*.........so beautiful, my dear romantic friend, I just love the magic you weave~ - SEA |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
My goodness, Mark..you just keep getting better...how can that be, when you are already the best? What a beautiful poem this is!! |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'Mornings song of promise being sung Across a sky where billows are strung Perfumes of love glide across my nose In the morning breath of scented rose' Beautiful work, m'friend. Love the images!  sp I won't go; I won't sleep; I can't breathe until you're resting here with me... |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
A well wrapped package, poetically, but so much more is in your poetry. You put your heart into every phrase. This is simply stunning Liz |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Mark, This reminds me of one of your other pieces...both are beautiful, holding something that belongs to someone we wish that we could be with helps to make the dream a little clearer doesn't it...as always your imagery brings this poem to life...in full color and form, well done my friend~ You can swim in the waves of the weave...without sinking into the mind of the weaver~ |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Mark my friend, this is as all yours are totally breathtaking, that beauty can be enchanted and called forth by your pen is such a pure gift. Truly one of your best, encased in golden light and delived in a wonderful and magicall collation of ethereal delight. A real beauty. Thank you for laying out this delectable delicacy for us Take care love Mushy  Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Mark, You my friend belong to the Hall of Fame. One should be set up here at Passions, and surely, you have to be the first person to be honoured. Cheers. Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
Excellent piece! Your romance always glitters in your writing |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Oh Mark, I just love this - flow and thought! Your cadence of words weaved in this is beautiful! Take care, Melissa The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania |
The pictures you painted were perfect. I loved this one. ~Susie "Many people hear voices when no one is there. Some of them are called mad and are shut up in rooms where they stare at walls all day. Others are call |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I awoke to the silent harmonies of dawn Watching the day creep across the lawn Soothing rays of warmth spreading light To the beauty hidden in shelter of night ======================== Naked oaks stretching towards the sky Awakened by the hawks screeching cry Needles of pines showering in the wind As shadows of the day slowly descend Mornings song of promise being sung Across a sky where billows are strung Perfumes of love glide across my nose In the morning breath of scented rose ========================= This day would be perfect in it's glow With God's gifts I have come to know All unwrapped in this mornings dew If only it came with the ribbon of you ===================== your making it real hard to pick a fave verse here my poetic Michaelangelo ... as I always say..your just so good at painting us the imagery so we can see it, smell it, and hear it... very cool MC...and the sweet longing is perfectly conveyed in the impact of that exquisite last verse ... diggin this one sweets.. and ya know this is my fave rhyme scheme me When to the sessions of sweet silent thought, I summon up remembrance of things past ... I sigh the lack of many a thing I sought. ~Shakespeare~ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Mark, Mark, Excellent work, I enjoyed. |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Once again Sir - you've penned a gem - I must say - I wish I'd written it myself!!! 5*'s definitely! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MarkB~ Delectable ! And ... more - so much more of your stretching persona. *wink* - LOVE IT - LOVE YOU ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Yes Mark, your words seem to grow to new heights regularly. This feels so peaceful, yet a little unsure. very lovely poem. Sandra |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
beautiful!! simply beautifully written cowboy mark..love it! hugs,g "oh baby baby, its a wild world..its hard to get by just upon a smile..." cat stevens |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
what words can describe the passion in this poem, beautifully written and beautifully formed into the gift that it is. thank you for this exquisite poem. Your words always seem to flow with such ease and calmness. |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Absolutely captivating... Can ya tell I just adored this poem... I'm sitting here with baited breath for the next post you shall honor us with... Thank you PoetFriend for such beautiful poetry you share... *~coco~* |
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A Whisper's Caress Senior Member
since 2000-11-03
Posts 791on the horizon of a fairytale |
Mark, how absolutely beautiful this is. really soft sigh!!!!!!!!! Look within the heart of a poet, and you will see a reflection of their soul. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Thank you all so very much. Your wonderful replies mean the world to me and always give me the push to continue and with all the beauty that God gives us daily it is hard not to find the inspiration< !signature--> If you find yourself stranded in a storm ...then reach for my hand and we will play in the puddles together [This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 01-18-2001).] |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
WOW!!! Mark a perfect write in every sense of the word....Excellent my friend ~HUG~ Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Mark, I will never think of ribbons of dawning in the same way again. Encore! write on! Keth Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
oh Mark what an amazing imagery have you given us.....love to make a thread. ((hugs)) Charisma |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I awoke to the sounds of sleet-laden rain Burrowed my head, thought "oh please, not again" But I dragged my cold aching self to work (For those bill-collectors can be such jerks!) *S* I got the bosses settled, snuck over here And found this poem describing such cheer I was grumpy with jealousy - then I reached the end... How well I know that longing, my friend! Beautiful poem, Mark! [This message has been edited by suthern (edited 01-19-2001).] |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Mark, such a colourful writer are you. Its so easy to imagine all in this poem, which I think is a very good sign of a very good poet. Parker |
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cathybohannan Member
since 2000-07-31
Posts 140Paintsville,KY |
Mark, a beautiful choice of words to express this poem. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Tracie-Thank you so much. I don't know about perfect but you won't find me trying to change your mind. Kethry-Just remember.......God's beauty is always there if we take the time to look for it. Thank you much. Charisma-Thank you so much for always making me smile. suthern-I think we all do once in awhile. Thank you so very much for the wonderful reply. It brought more than a smile to my face. Parker-Thank you sir for always leaving a kind reply and if you could imagine it then I am pleased that my words were good enough. Cathy-I couldn't go wrong using God's beauty now could I? Thank you sis for your encouragement and strength. Love ya. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Oh...this one makes me step back and say "Why couldn't I have thought of that?" Great poem with lots of wonderful imagery that bring it to life and the ending...wow, wraps the entire package up nicely ~ Ruth www.angelfire.com/pa/OriginalMinds/index.html |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Just one addition could make something already wonderful perfect... |
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