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Water Lilies in the Night |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869
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Keats Sonnet < !signature-->My love flows freely like a babbling brook winding over banks of your existence floating like two water lilies' in the night blazing as a fire near an inglenook flickering like two flames in a distance our love is not fickle like a rainbow it is a steady sapphire bengal light two hearts rhyming, a rondeau in a book sometimes flowing over rocks of indifference twined like morning glory, lilac bright tangoing while dusty coral winds blow will you catch me if I fall from your arms? before melting away like the driven snow a bubble in a babbling brook of charms A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) [This message has been edited by Victoria (edited 01-17-2001).] |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Victoria~ I don't know Keats' work, is this one of his, or yours? Either way, it's beautiful!  -SEA |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
thanks sea..no keats is the form..i wrote it. The rhyme scheme is abcabdcabcdede Glad you enjoyed.. give it a try some time~V~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Victoria, Whom ever wrote this, it is a master piece of writing and I was happy to read it. |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Indeed you did justice with his style and your poetic talent....outstanding V.... Greeneyes~ *** "Within you I lose myself Without you I find myself Wanting to be lost again." -Unknown |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
thank you seymour and Lauren..im so glad you like the sonnet..nice to hear from both of you.. ~V~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Victoria--Lovely Sonnet...beautifully penned. Poeminister |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(sigh) Beautiful, lovely sonnet! I loved all the images and voice in here, this piece is a work of art indeed! Excellent work, my friend, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Beautiful sonnet ....... I am still studying them before I attempt one but you have made it more enticing to try by giving such a lovely example. I applaud you on this one. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed reading your poem Victoria...James |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Wonderful writing.....beautifully crafted! |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
love this beautiful piece...very well written....love it and also the form. excellent ((Charisma)) |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
High praise to you - for doing a fantastic job on such a difficult form - I floated in that brook right with you ~S~ |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Victoria, sonnet supreme, or sonnet surprise I saw Keats applauding before my eyes. write on Keth Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Poeminister..Nice to hear from you..thank you for peeking in Noah..thank you so much..pleased you enjoyed my sonnet Mark..i love sonnets..shakespearian, sicilian, terza rima spenserian and italian are some of my favorites. Most are written in iambic pentameter..10 syllables a line.. i think they help with writers block too..pleased you enjoyed Mark James..thank you i am happy you enjoyed ethome..thank you so much..always nice to hear from you ethome.. Charisma..Thank you hon..i enjoyed writing it Kethry..thank you so much for that nice compliment..nice to hear from you Kethry.. ~V~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
Keats is one of my favorites and you have done his style up well....an enchanting read Pepper "A poem is the very image of life expressed in its eternal truth." Percy Bysshe Shelley |
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