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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597
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(thanks for the concrete idea Marge) ~ **oh my** *yellowed moon* in clear night's sky starts low 'n rises high carries so many a lie from an ancient eye *maybe to satisfy* **a sigh** ~ |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
I like this. Nicely done. Poeminister |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Oh my Krawdad Pie Like your moon up in the brightly lit sky How come when it's all done - I still feel the glow in the morn of the sun ? ~*Marge*~ Capitally done. And it's called sweet inspiration ~ Glad you caught it ! ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Because the moon is actually lit by the sun, of course....  Krawdad... I like this - and I'll be watching for more of your work for sure... You've got a great outlook... Nice to have you here at Passions.. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Very nice format and wonderful writing |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
I agree, nice format and a wonderful write! Nathan |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Poeminister,Marge,Nan,Paula,Nate: Thank you each for your nice comments. As MARGE alludes to, dalliance in this medium compels one to do this sort of thing, and on-the-spot no less. To deny it is to cut off one's hand! NAN - Actually I wasn't thinking about the sun at all. The "ancient eye" is indeed the ancient human eye, explaining the moon mystery in what we might think today to be a lie (mythology). The good and the bad of minimalization is the opening to generalization and the lose of detail. I'm discovering quickly that one of the benefits of PIP is the life of a poem after the poet sets it aside. I had my doubts, but this place is OK. MARGE - Thanks again for the "seed". |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You are quickly becoming a favorite read of mine---and have more questions about that "ancient eye"--does this correspond to the "eye of Horus"???? A lovely write--from one moon lover to another! |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
A shape poem awesomely done! |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
This is beautiful and beautifully done  -SEA |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Oh I love this sweet little yellow moon...cute Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Krawdad...you keep writing like this...and your poetry will breathe for a long, long time... and then some... |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Serenity,VAS,SEA,Tracie66,Sunshine, Thanks all for the read and comments. I do appreciate it. If the shaped pooem hasn't been an exercise at PIP, it ought to be. This was a lot of fun to do, but was also a lot harder to get right than I would have guessed. It's just a simple ball, right? /:^)== =#== |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
wonderful....*sigh*...an so beautiful love it. Charisma |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
This is a splendid write Krawdad and I too enjoyed the format in presentation A lovely read... ~coco~ |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Thanks *C* & *C* for the nice comments. Great to have readers enjoy something as much as I enjoyed writing it. It's also nice, with the new rules, that an older submission comes back because of a read and a comment (thanks for the demo, Coco). Krawdad |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
i like E very nifty!hugs, g "maybe one day we can turn and face our fears maybe one day we can reach out through our tears..." -a grant |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Very nice would be putting it mildly. This was wonderful and who better to plant a seed of Luna than our Margie girl. Loved the write and the thoughts that come with it. If you find yourself stranded in a storm ...then reach for my hand and we will play in the puddles together |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
dg & Mark, Thank you both, Glad you liked the moon. Kraw' |
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