Open Poetry #12 |
“When You Fall” (a song in the making) |
Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
You believe you’ll always keep your place, up at the top… You’re riding high, up in the sky, and it’s not going to stop… But take it from someone who’s been both up and very down… You’re going to need a friend there, when your ego hits the ground! I’ve been standing back aways, because I hate big crowds… I hear something in your laugh, that’s cold and way too loud… It bothers me, but I’ll wait here, because you’ll need to know… You have a home when there is nowhere else, that you can go… (Chorus) And all you ever have to do is call… You know I’ll be here waiting, when there’s nothing left at all… So, stay up there and have yourself a ball… You know I’ll be here waiting… just to catch you when you fall… Write on! -<--<--{(@ |
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angelswing Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705United Kingdom |
I see what you mean, this would make a most exellent song, I enjoyed reading it, wish I could write songs, but unfortunatly I have the musical talent of a 5 year old who's primary diet consists of baked beans ! Thanks alot . L.of.L. Tom . Don't try, do or do not, there is no try . - Master Yoda - |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Ah, but Tom......even beans are musical, you know!!!! Thank you for your reply, and I'm hoping the melody befits the words!! Write on! -<--<--{(@ |
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Enola Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 138England |
Hmm - I like it! Song lyrics are hard to write, I think you've done a good job, is there any more of it? I hope the melody gives this the justice it deserves . The tragedy of it is that nobody sees the look of desperation on my face. Thousands and thousands of us, and we're passing one another without a look |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Thank you, Enola!! These are the complete words, but as I am a keyboardist, there will be an extended lead break after the chorus, then a repeated chorus to finish. And yes, the melody I've written is befitting the words...I'm happy with the combination!! Write on! -<--<--{(@ |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Sunny1... I enjoyed this read and I ask of thee if I may be in background chorus to this melody... Hun, I bet ya know I like this tune the lyrics are sweet... Hugs2Ualways *~coco~* |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
~~~ Coco ~~~ Of course you can, my friend!! I will join you in some harmonies, as I love singing background vocals too!! Thank you!! :)>>Smiles from Sunny<<:) |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Sounds great! It must be hard to put it to music and make it all come together...... -SEA |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
SEA... So glad you liked my song!! Actually, I dearly love putting the words to music....the words always come first to me, then I sit at my keyboard, and the melody usually makes itself known. It's like putting a jigsaw puzzle together only with words and notes!! Thank you!! :)>>Smiles from Sunny<<:) |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy the read |
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