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PoeticKnight
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since 2000-01-20

Posts 1144
New Orleans, LA

0 posted 2001-03-21 10:06 AM

Somewhere in the night
Someone will cry
Waiting for love to die

Neon lights won’t illuminate
Darkened streets where aimless souls,
Masses of flesh await
Filling little vacant holes
That won’t satiate

Shiny diamonds of dirty glass
Sparkle once, and once only
Fading in twilight fast
A little lost and lonely,
But too bright to last

So much given away too soon
Can never be retrieved
Where once begged for highest noon,
Now all are grieved
With a fainting swoon

Somewhere in the night
Someone did cry
Waiting for love to die

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

1 posted 2001-03-21 10:10 AM

I wanted to write a poetic response but some times there are no words..nicely done

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

2 posted 2001-03-21 10:11 AM

A mournful piece, this one. I think I've seen the street where this is happening, well one of the many. Well-wrriten forlorn.

Sunshine

Administrator

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2001-03-21 10:15 AM

and don't you just wish you could show that love that lives? Well done, PK...

Poet deVine

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since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

4 posted 2001-03-21 10:21 AM

Sad but so well done sir!!

PoeticKnight
Senior Member

since 2000-01-20

Posts 1144
New Orleans, LA

5 posted 2001-03-21 10:23 AM

Thank you all very much.

Sunshine, what exactly do you mean?

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

6 posted 2001-03-21 11:12 AM

"So much given away too soon
Can never be retrieved"
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this spoke to me..........I'd say in a different way than you might have intended.......I liked this very much.....great writing

SEA

PoeticKnight
Senior Member

since 2000-01-20

Posts 1144
New Orleans, LA

7 posted 2001-03-21 11:27 AM

Thanks SEA, but I'd like to know how it spoke to you, and how that differed from what was intended. Drop me a line please.

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

8 posted 2001-03-21 11:33 AM

loved it

SEA

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since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

9 posted 2001-03-21 11:33 AM

PK~ it just reminded me of girls I've known in my life.........they gave their innocence way too soon and ended up so sad and forever changed.....it just broke my heart.....they made mistakes that thankfully, I learned from........It was a memory hitting full force, that I didn't expect. I don't know if that was your intention with those lines, but they were powerful.

SEA

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

10 posted 2001-03-21 01:26 PM

a dear friend told me once "it is easier to kill love than to nurture it."
He was dead right. I enjoyed this very, very much.

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

Dawn Eclipse
Senior Member

since 2000-01-31

Posts 637
The Horsehead Nebula

11 posted 2001-03-21 04:32 PM

A very good piece, yet very sad. thank you for sharing!

"Forget regret, or life is yours to miss. No other course, no other way... No day but today"
~Broadway Musical RENT~

*Cassandra Roseen*

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

12 posted 2001-03-21 05:00 PM

Aw hell! I don't think it ever dies, but, you're right you're always waiting for it to do so.... this is a very worldly render and I enjoyed it very very much...like the idea!

The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges.

walker
Member Elite

since 2001-02-11

Posts 2240
Florida

13 posted 2001-03-21 05:19 PM

Loved, La muerte del Amor, very beautiful!

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

14 posted 2001-03-21 06:11 PM

Oh, how sad, but true. Excellent piece.
Sandra

Meadowmuse
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since 1999-12-27

Posts 3263

15 posted 2001-03-21 06:16 PM

An interesting composition. Many images I found symbolically suggestive, smooth. Nicely done. Thanks for it.

Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau

Sven

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since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

16 posted 2001-03-21 07:46 PM

Does love die? Sadly. . . yes. . .

But does love also live?? Wonderfully. . . yes as well. . .

So, love lives. . .
and love dies. . .

But. . . what keeps love from dying???

Superb PK. . .

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