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Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

0 posted 2001-03-20 10:30 AM

Someday, the sun will come out to shine again
And out there from the midst of the splendid rays
I hope to see my princess come to heal my pain.

Somewhere, lies a heaven to be revisited
And out there from amongst the castles of hope
I wish to see my reborn love unrestricted.

Somehow, my one and only dream shall come true
And out there painted on the canvas of love
I dream to see fresh colours to come rushing through.

As of now, I am in the constant state of wait
For somehow, somewhere and someday to happen
Till then, even in the absence of sun, I'll sweat!

~

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2001-03-20 10:32 AM

Till then, even in the absence of sun, I'll sweat!

Anticipation...oh yes...so hopeful, that you've cheered me this morn! Thank you much my friend.

Sunshine

Administrator

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since 1999-06-25

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Listening to every heart

2 posted 2001-03-20 10:41 AM

Packratmike
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since 2001-02-25

Posts 632
California, USA

3 posted 2001-03-20 02:08 PM

Oh, this is really great! Loved the read. Thank you.

Mike

ethome
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since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

4 posted 2001-03-20 05:18 PM

Ah my dear poet friend how I have missed your wonderful poetic passages and your ramblings where you had so much fun being comfortable with your muse....good to read your words again and welcome back....this sweating will diminish and turn into searching if the one you are currently waiting on never comes to the warm chambers of your heart forever.......you take care!!

The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges.

Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

5 posted 2001-03-21 03:03 AM

O Serene one, Thank you... cheering you up makes me happy...

Karilea, Thanks for the shower of sun shine...

Mike, Thank you for coming by and for your words...

ethome, my friend, it feels good to be back... thank you so much...

Regards to all,
Sudhir

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

6 posted 2001-03-21 05:30 PM

I believe we are both waiting and hoping for that someday...James

jellybeans
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since 2000-10-13

Posts 2298

7 posted 2001-03-21 05:37 PM

oh too cool...love this....the ending *shakes her head* just perfect...certainly can identify with this

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

8 posted 2001-03-21 05:46 PM

Somewhere, lies a heaven to be revisited
And out there from amongst the castles of hope
I wish to see my reborn love unrestricted.

Somehow, my one and only dream shall come true
And out there painted on the canvas of love
I dream to see fresh colours to come rushing through.
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Sud .. love the hope and the never give up spirit of this..
great rhyme pattern..and use of inner rhyme too
and that last line...perfect poetic impact...
great write dear poet sir

oh you speak to me in riddles
and you speak to me in rhymes
my body aches to breathe your breath
your words keep me alive
~Sarah McLachlan~

twilah
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since 2000-09-25

Posts 91
Maine, USA

9 posted 2001-03-21 07:31 PM

I think this is a very gentle reflective poem. And so smooth...I loved reading it over and over again...thank you for sharing it.....Twilah

Sven

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since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

10 posted 2001-03-21 07:41 PM

Only you Sudhir could write a poem like this. . . one that combines love and humor. . .

Excellent my friend. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Ethan Halo
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since 2000-04-28

Posts 793
on the roof again

11 posted 2001-03-21 08:06 PM

i like the determination... beautiful words, as always.
*ahh* that hits the spot. i feel you.

You gotta love livin, cause dyin's a pain in the ass.

"It don't mean a thing
if it ain't got that swing."

Saunni
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since 2000-07-11

Posts 1777
West Virginia

12 posted 2001-03-21 08:45 PM

Oh, that last line is too cool but the whole poem is awesome.

Sauni

Sauni :)
Have you ever known the color grey when the nighttime finds you weak
I have, I've walked that road each time; that's where my angel sleeps

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

13 posted 2001-03-21 10:36 PM

I am so glad to see you posting again, Sudhir, I've missed your words!!

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

14 posted 2001-03-26 05:43 PM

I like this, Sudhir... When your wait is over, may you be so happy you consider every moment of the wait and every drop of sweat worthwhile. *S* Well done!

kcsgrandma
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since 2000-09-24

Posts 1522
Presque Isle, ME

15 posted 2001-03-27 12:14 PM

As of now, I am in the constant state of wait
For somehow, somewhere and someday to happen
Till then, even in the absence of sun, I'll sweat!
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If only all the somehows, somewheres and somedays we promise ourselves would arrive. I feel this. Hope yours come soon.

To love another person is to see the face of God.
- Les Miserables

Marilyn

Katherine Chandler
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since 2001-03-07

Posts 280
Florida, USA

16 posted 2001-03-27 04:29 PM

Oh, my dear, this was truly wonderful to read. Thank you, Kate

Blessings

Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood.
T S Eliot

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant

since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

17 posted 2001-03-28 11:03 AM

Thank you all so very much...

and many regards to each one of you,
Sudhir

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