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| Open Poetry #12 |
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Senseless Absence |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
yesterday, I walked to the edge of logic... stretched it as far as it would go, but still, it didn’t make any sense... why aren’t you here? today, I looked at my reflection in the water... even swirled it around to distort the picture, but, still, I did not understand... why was my face the only one staring back at me? tonight, I tried counting the countless stars... even grabbed a few for my heart’s shine, still it didn’t add up... dear love, where are you? I try to rhyme...I attempt to reason; I think it to death...I completely ignore it; all is absolute madness, my precious... just ease this chaos...pull me close and bridge this distance. -kh 03/19/01 to be with you... |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(tears falling down my cheeks) Oh dear friend, I can feel such pain and loneliness in this poem! I am so sorry to hear of your emptiness. I feel that way a lot too, for I still haven't found my first love. But I do know that everyone has a true love in this world, and you will definitely find your significant other. I pray with all my heart that you find all the love and light your heart longs for. You have such a beautiful heart, dear friend, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Mabel A. Dilley Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 859Seattle, WA, USA |
Distance is like a stone beneath the water. The pieces keep floating up for years. A very yearning poem and one that tells of lonleliness rather than aloneness. I loved the part when you distorted the image staring back at you in the water. Good writing. "I am not now that which I have been." |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Really like the whole poem, but especially the last verse. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
tonight, I tried counting the countless stars... even grabbed a few for my heart’s shine, still it didn’t add up... dear love, where are you? I try to rhyme...I attempt to reason; I think it to death...I completely ignore it; all is absolute madness, my precious... just ease this chaos...pull me close and bridge this distance. =============================== so many questions poetically pondered... very cool write sp .. love the inner conflict...the yen and yang of this. "tonight, I tried counting the countless stars... even grabbed a few for my heart’s shine," love the imagery and premise in this line.. way cool  great writing ... keep on trying to find reason in the rhyme  We wish ourselves beautiful, |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
My tears fall for you. I understand the feeling in this poem. {{hugs}} |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
I feel for you, my friend. Well expressed! A quarter of a century must pass, for the writer to understand what and why he writes. |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Noah: oh, my friend...thank you for your sympathy...but it isn't exactly emptiness...I do have a loved one, but he happens to be far away right now, so it isn't THAT bad, I guess...but I do appreciate your kind words! Thank you!! Julian: thank you, my friend, for your wonderful reply! I am glad you liked this! JLR: thanks so much! Glad you enjoyed this!! JM: hey you! yes, quite the ponderings, indeed! this is actually something that popped into my head at around 4 in the morning...I just woke up and couldn't ignore it...now THAT hasn't happened in a while!  But, thank you so much, my friend, for your compliments! It's great to know you liked this!!  kitkat: thanks for the hugs! I am glad you could stop by!  walker: thank you, my friend, for your reply...I am glad you liked it!! sp  to be with you... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Such powerful yearning... so well written! *S* |
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