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VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

0 posted 2001-03-18 11:34 AM

Cocooned
Virginia Salter

sky is crying
grass is lying
in its wait of gentle spring

drinking in the sustenance
beneath the lilt
of birds in sing

there is a grayness
all around
wrapping up the morn

as if the world is
cocooned in
silken layers of sweet adorn

yet just outside
the tiers of silk
old Sol beams its heav’nly light

when the drinking
of earth is done
floral array shall stay the night

© March 18, 2001

Jellybean King
Member

since 2001-03-07

Posts 153
Jelly, Bean

1 posted 2001-03-18 11:46 AM

This gives me such a warm and fuzzy feeling on this Sunday morning! Lines I like best are:

"drinking in the sustenance
beneath the lilt
of birds in sing"

"as if the world is
cocooned in
silken layers of sweet adorn"

Jellybean King

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

2 posted 2001-03-18 11:53 AM

Thank you, Jellybean! You are so sweet to read and comment.

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

3 posted 2001-03-18 12:17 PM

drinking in the sustenance
beneath the lilt
of birds in sing

there is a grayness
all around
wrapping up the morn

as if the world is
cocooned in
silken layers of sweet adorn
============================

Virginia this is lovely and well written
you have employed some unique poetic phrases and imagery in this piece
And also a clever rhyme pattern which added to its pleasures
well done poetess

We wish ourselves beautiful,
we cry in the night.
Its not the love you fear ...
its the fall from the height.
~Edwin McCain~

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

4 posted 2001-03-18 12:21 PM

Thanks so very much, JM, you are too kind and very appreciated!

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

5 posted 2001-03-18 12:30 PM

Really enjoyed the flow, the sound, the feel of this VAS.

jwesley

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

6 posted 2001-03-18 12:51 PM

Thaks JW, glad you enjoyed.

Mabel A. Dilley
Senior Member

since 2001-03-17

Posts 859
Seattle, WA, USA

7 posted 2001-03-18 03:20 PM

Yes, it is gray and raining today, but I believe that between your poetic words and good ol' Sol, spring shall arrive on schedule.

"I am not now that which I have been."

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