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Renewal of Confidence
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Renewal of Confidence |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
 the color of your presence brightens my eyes... simply realizing you are near breaks my defense... mere minutes it would take to sever all ties with memories of life spent on that side of the fence. living in your eyes, all is undeniably right... each day’s rhyme flows with perfect cadence. I’m not sure how, but just skies of blue remain in sight... from this moment, fulfillment of our vows shall commence. I’d all but lost my faith in human nature... finding love was a concept I’d long left behind. but, you appeared amidst the storm, offering the cure, what I required to pull through a fate so unkind. so, as long as this pen lies in my heart... until the river stops flowing from my soul... even when the first day after my last breath should start... you’ll be the one that will keep my spirit whole. -kh 03/17/01 do I believe we'd be better off apart? |
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Jellybean King Member
since 2001-03-07
Posts 153Jelly, Bean |
I think you beautifully describe how Love can transform us in miraculous ways...touching and tender...pregnant with Hope! Jellybean King |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
living in your eyes, all is undeniably right... each day’s rhyme flows with perfect cadence. I’m not sure how, but just skies of blue remain in sight... from this moment, fulfillment of our vows shall commence. ===================== so, as long as this pen lies in my heart... until the river stops flowing from my soul... even when the first day after my last breath should start... you’ll be the one that will keep my spirit whole. ==================== hey girlie...where you been  and look at your rhyming your lil ole poetic brains out LOL what ever you take on poetically ..you master it quickly... must be cuz ya are a born poet, huh  very cool write and perfect cadence.. and I see by that last verse... you and I are thinking along the same lines Great minds think alike?  well done poetess.. nice to see you back with pen of anticipation in hand. We wish ourselves beautiful, |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
sp, you continue to amaze me with the way that your words just come from your heart. . . this is no exception. . . excellent. . . ----------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Mabel A. Dilley Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 859Seattle, WA, USA |
The quill stuck in the heart tickles the fancy and pours out passion equalled only by the moon encircled softly in lavendar glow. "I am not now that which I have been." |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
What a beautiful declaration of love! |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
This was very beautiful and you are very lucky to have found it. Well done. LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
JK: yes, love can do wonderful things...I am glad you liked this one!! Thanks!! JM: where've I been? hmmm...you don't wanna know...  Rough week...BUT, anyway...thank you so much, my friend, for your extremely flattering reply...you know I always appreciate your 'visits!' Mastering poetry?? Dunno 'bout that, but you are too kind to think so! Hey, and this one was even without an assignment from the Teach!! What do you think of that?? Yes, great minds DO think alike...I totally agree there!!  Your poem was absolutely awesome, btw...good ol' (...) I've missed 'em, come to think of it!! Sven: Amazed? wow...thank you so much! You are so kind! I am glad you liked this!! Julian: well, what can I say to that lovely reply? thank you kindly!! I am glad you could stop by! JLR: thank you! I am glad you enjoyed this!! LW: why thank you so much...and, yes, I do feel quite fortunate...thanks!! sp  to be with you... |
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