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JLR
Senior Member

since 2001-02-04

Posts 1785

0 posted 2001-03-17 10:04 PM

Be My Sand

I know this isn’t a fairy tale
Happily ever after was never our deal
Still I would settle for one night with you
Just to feel
For a moment, for an hour
Something good
Today there is more wrong in my life
Than I think was ever right
I don’t mean to use you as a place to hide
But I need just the smallest break
Just to catch my breath
May I rest in you one more time
I’m still not ready for any of this

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

1 posted 2001-03-17 10:52 PM

May I rest in you one more time
I’m still not ready for any of this
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oh how I related to this...
cool write JLR .. sincere well expressed reflections
cool title as well.
well done poet

We wish ourselves beautiful,
we cry in the night.
Its not the love you fear ...
its the fall from the height.
~Edwin McCain~

Katherine Chandler
Member

since 2001-03-07

Posts 280
Florida, USA

2 posted 2001-03-17 10:55 PM

Very moving read JLR, I especially enjoyed the usage of sand in the title, I caught the significance in the poem and it was so creative.

Be blessed!

Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood.
T S Eliot

Voiceless
Senior Member

since 2001-02-19

Posts 686
Under the stars upon the wind

3 posted 2001-03-17 10:59 PM

I liked the use of words in this..
You feel the emotions within

~*Peachy Be*~

Just A Woman
Senior Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 507

4 posted 2001-03-18 12:35 PM

Bare honesty......brings tears to my eyes. Not many writers can capture themselves so strongly in their writing but you do every time. I don't know if that makes sense but it's a compliment! Be gentle with yourself.

"When people show you who they are, believe them"

~Maya Angelou~

walker
Member Elite

since 2001-02-11

Posts 2240
Florida

5 posted 2001-03-18 11:03 AM

JLR- I love the way that you capture that need. Very intense. Thanks for sharing.

A quarter of a century must pass, for the writer to understand what and why he writes.

[This message has been edited by walker (edited 03-18-2001).]

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

6 posted 2001-03-18 11:10 AM

Fantastically woven, JLR. There are definitely times one needs someone special in which, with whom...to take a break. Really like this one!

"Come to me, all you who are weary, and I will give you rest."

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

7 posted 2001-03-18 02:17 PM

sometimes. . . we just need to be held. . .

wonderful my friend. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

OLIAS
Senior Member

since 2000-06-20

Posts 1090
Pearl city Iowa

8 posted 2001-03-18 03:14 PM

Very emotional, a wonderful write, thank you

Regards,
Olias

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

9 posted 2001-03-18 03:19 PM

JRL...very intense feeling in so few words..and so easy to understand ...a universal need for all sometimes...thank you.

Paula Finn
Member Ascendant

since 2000-06-17

Posts 5546
missouri

10 posted 2001-03-19 12:48 PM

You know hiding isnt gonna help...but I really love the way you expressed yourself here girl...hugs

ParisGrl
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 610

11 posted 2001-03-20 03:26 PM

R.J.

Hiding doesn't help the pain any but i totally understand where you are coming from. I'm here for you if you wanna talk about it. Keep writing....and i'll keep reading.

*hugs*
~Laura~

ParisGrl
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 610

12 posted 2001-03-20 03:35 PM

BUMP!

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