Open Poetry #12 |
Not Ready for the Rain to Leave |
Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Not Ready for the Rain to Leave azure blue, so clear the sky today and the sun she's peeking in so bright but I think I'm missing some the gray and perhaps there's too much light I'm not ready for the rain to leave I need a reason for my heart so heavy it is difficult for me to believe I'd like dams to flood, to break this levy if a song comes on with sweet violin I feel the chills go across my soul the tears they fill and well within for a moment of feel, so very old for I won't cry in the light of the sun and you can't get me to be the one to pull you down, nor make you frown no, I won't rain on your parade of fun but I shall let your memory loose to go the way of you, if you choose I'm just not ready for the rain to leave for it would mask the way I grieve |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Oh Lady...this is so poignant..I know this feeling. |
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Kerri S Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 61Rhode Island |
This is a wonderful poem. I myself find it hard to grieve when the world seems so happy. You have put alot of emotion into this poem. Kerri |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I'm not ready for the rain to leave I need a reason for my heart so heavy it is difficult for me to believe I'd like dams to flood, to break this levy if a song comes on with sweet violin I feel the chills go across my soul the tears they fill and well within for a moment of feel, so very old =================== but I shall let your memory loose to go the way of you, if you choose I'm just not ready for the rain to leave for it would mask the way I grieve ======================== well done Lady... poetically perfect use of comparisons, imagery and emotion in this bittersweet write, its beauty lies in it sincere confessions and melancholy. We wish ourselves beautiful, |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Sometimes it somehow makes it easier for the sky to shed our tears... we're not so all alone. Well done, Lady! |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
All I can say is I understand. This was very well done. Sandra |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Well said, my friend, well written...leaves one thinking... jwesley |
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Jellybean King Member
since 2001-03-07
Posts 153Jelly, Bean |
I love the feeling in this...that despite the pain of grieving, sometimes we just have to do it...not able to give up the sadness so easily, and maybe we shouldn't. Beautiful and sad at the same time! Jellybean King |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'azure blue, so clear the sky today and the sun she's peeking in so bright but I think I'm missing some the gray and perhaps there's too much light' Yes, I do understand this one...wonderfully written! sp to be with you... |
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Mabel A. Dilley Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 859Seattle, WA, USA |
Outstanding use of comparative language. Poignant in its delivery of feelings shot straight through to the reader. Excellent. "I am not now that which I have been." |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Martie...poignant is a feeling I believe you and might might wear well, thank you... Kerri, then your cup must always be half-way full....a wonderful way to be, regardless of what others might think.... Janet Marie - sincere, a key word, I do believe.... suthern, so very right, sweet Lady.... Catalinamoon, of course you do.... James, if you think, then perhaps I did this write right.... Jellybean King - so you like the ins and outs of passionate feelings, good! snowpants, I knew you would.... Julian, a kind critique if ever I saw one, thank you. Thank you all. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
This is why I associate so much with the sad song sung by Skeeter Davis called "The End of the World"...time and again I find myself the object of this song...James |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
such sadness in this poem, Lady. If you want gray, you would LOVE my hair!! |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
James, thank you... 'Deer, sometimes it is good to share the gray...but you made me smile... |
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